All Comments on 'Beneath Ch. 05: The Cumming of Age'

With the use of the term "owner" the entire scene became too detached for me. This is his mother. He should be feeling lust, maybe some guilt, but absolutely extreme excitement. Some of the adjectives about sexual parts seemed more like a biology lesson and a Victorian tone. I'd go for the more natural tone. Can you retry?

One of the worst things I’ve ever read