by 0131aj
although i liked the level of detail you went into, i wasn't too sure about the amount of fantasies you seemed to rocket through. maybe you could have seperated the story into much more detailed and mind blowing accounts of what each person was doing and thinking, instead of cramming so much into one story. however saying that, the premise of a threesome for his birthday, whilst being a tricky and over used hook, was perfectly executed and really set the scene. continuenty though the girls didn't appear to be drunk toward the end, despite several mentions of the fact in the beginning.
overall though i really enjoyed this story and would love to see what else you have written. well done :D
I wish my wife would go along with something like this. Secretly, I think she does want to be with another woman.