by Twistedfunandgames
Definitely want more but forget about bringing other men into it. It would ruin it
Loved it. would have liked to have seen them get together sooner. I hope they all would have game clean and tell the truth about past events. I hope we see more of the three of them and maybe a couple girls from the club.
I have a difficult time reading a story when I have to reread a sentence to add the words to make it flow.
You could do better if you were to print out your story and read it out aloud to someone or yourself at least.
I hope this didn't seem too harsh, but