All Comments on 'Big City Cock Ch. 02'

Lol this time you mixed up Carl and James a few times. Read the chapter out loud if you want to catch more stuff.

Good action but definitely the name mix up continue! Lol

Hey, don't beat yourself up over a few name mix-ups. It's your first story so there's bound to be some rough edges, but you're getting there. Chapter #2 was definitely edited better. And this story is heating up very nicely.

You have had plenty of editing critique. The story was powerfully erotic and arousing and has the potential for more chapters. Writing and editing improve with practice! Would have loved to take James' place!

Great story, will there be another parts?

Makes me want to be James, he was the one really pleasured!

James..Jessica…the type of name mixup that I like…

So jealous of James wiggling and whimpering like a worshipful little girlfriend…I’m so hard…Thanks..

JT