All Comments on 'Birthday Pool Party Ch. 06'

Had my doubts after page one. Here we are at the end and you have it again! Hope the next chapter is as good!

What a twist ending!! I did not see that cliffhanger coming and I need to see what’s next. Keep it coming

Better title is "Off to Never Never Land". This reminds me of a school friend who in speech class had to give a 200-500 word speech. He named the 12 Apostles 20 times and sat down. He didn't grade out and better than this story. I fairness I only skimmed 3,4,and 5. Not a moralist but basing a 6(so far) chapter story on screwing an 18 year old with impulse problems. Letting her move in with you being 2 decades older than her. I think this is a fantasy gone boring and repetitive..

5 Stars. I figured David was involved in some way.

I would love to see father and daughter make love.

Saw the David twist coming, but you did a decent job disguising it. Please don't have Kayla end up with her dad- too cliche.

Loved it. While I know it was a girls only party, they should have invited dad to sunbathe and skinny dip with them.

Now it makes sense why David was so concerned about Kayla’s Dad dating Lexi. It was never the age difference, he just didn’t want to get caught.

I like your writing. Flows beautifully. Wish I could do that! One minor error where you referred to Lexi instead of Kayla but, again, beautifully written. Thank you

Great cliff hanger. KAYKE DITCHES DAVID SHE HOOKS UP WITH DAD AND LEXI.

Kayle needs to fuck her dad after Hazel lexi threesome.

Girls need some lesbian play.

Great writing thanks

The sex is well written but as with many of these stories it can get repetitive. But the characters and the story are great. Looking forward to the next or next several installments.

Good. I never liked David, so I'm happy to read this plot development.

Hurry can't wait 🤣

O shit. David is ded. Good.

Ooo

Great cliffhanger

Not only is this an STD-free world, but apparently also a lube-free one. An awful lot of dry anal sex.

Whoo doggies as Jed used to say. Wonder if they will find David's remains for a funeral............ LOL

Wow!!! I didn't see that coming. I really like your writing. Keep up the good work. Thank you for it.

and that is why he has a problem with lexi. he is afraid that she will tell kayla. busted..I love the story so far - thanks

Still 7-14 and I had David, well the author pegged.

oh wow! david! hit me with a ton of bricks! didnt see that coming,, enjoying this tale(drama) and of course the eroticism of it all..

Fantastic story writing.

I knew David was wrong for the kind and loving Kayla.

I can almost see who she'd turn to for comfort, and I hope I'm right.