by JellyDonut2
For your first submission, I think you did well. Just think, after only one story, you are already better than
BiggPoppaDom52
4 stars
Great first chapter , dont let the trollsget to you. as stated in the comments Below you have at least submitted atory.
Looking forwardn to the next chapter
Very fast story, I love it. I am sure I have read a similar-sounding story somewhere before. Looking forward to future chapters.
I totally love the story so far it reflects a lot that happened to me in the past. More please
There is a follow up post coming. The plan is for an entire series.
One of the very best stories on this category , right now. Just avoid overemphasizing a supposed excitement over the whole situation. Unwilling excitement is one thing, saying "strangely" is another. Shame at the excitement is understandable but between the shock, the fear and the psychological use of sexual excitement on herself, it cannot be implied that this woman consciously wants to be excited. That's where the shame usually comes from. Keep writing! Good stuff.
I like how this story started. Still waiting for the next chapter. Will I see it any time soon?
OMFG PLEASE I want and crave more I have jacked off to this 7 times and licked up all the cum like a good wimp so please part 2
I can't wait for DeShawn grandpa to have his way with sub-Lorain and her fertile daughter.