All Comments on 'Blindsided Ch. 04'

A fine tale and a suitable dollop of natural justice for the despicable Ivan.

JR

This was a good tale to read, I wish you were still writing! 5 stars

somewhere east of Omaha

A very good story. Ivan was quite the asshole. It was good to see her reclaim her confident life life and squeeze the sorry bastard for all she could get. I hope she finds a man worthy of her to e a good father for Cliff.

Very creative. Marie was put upon by a guy with no backbone. A guy who deserved a smack down worst than any married cheater I have read about on this site. A little more background on the M/C's would have rounded out the presentation.

I feel like Ivan, narcissist that he is would have denied the setup with David until he was shown proof that he had indeed had sex with Marie. Nice story.

Nice twist. Thanks I enjoyed this.

An excellent tale, well-written and totally absorbing. I enjoyed it immensely though much of it was heart wrenching. In the end, i5t was uplifting and hopeful. Good job, keep up the great work!! Oh, and thanks!

Femdom agitprop from the rear end of the megaphone.

I loved the switch in this story. Way to go, girl! 5 stars.

His the one cheating, that is a good switch out of the norm on this site

Fresh and with interesting plot twists.

I'm normally not a fan of bi sexuality but you handled it very well.

I might have liked more pain for Ivan and maybe even Lynn.

5 stars for sure

This is a story I've thought the Loving Wives category needs as something of a counter balance to all the cheating wives btb stories here, and I won't pretend that I don't read those and for the most part enjoy them, I just know the reality, that cheating spouses include both sexes, and if historically reported statistics are accurate, men are even more guilty as a gender than women are. Though I suspect that over the last 50 or 60 years, especially since the development of the birth control pill the percentage of female cheaters has climbed to po9bably near equal levels with their male counterparts. And this is not said as from a woman's perspective. It's said from the perspective of a man who was cheated on by his own ex wife. I'm just level headed and fair enough to view it honestly. The discrepancy in numbers of stories of cheating spouses here being so heavily weighted on the side of the wife being the cheater is due I think to the greatest number of writers here being men. But btb can just as easily mean burn the bastard as burn the bitch, because in all fairness when applied to real life cheating spouses it should, be, and probably more often. Face it. The balance of power between the sexes has always been weighted toward us men. And as the saying goes, power corrupts.

Nice little twist 5*

Gave it 5 stars because for once the woman wasn't painted as a brain dead bimbo as happens so often in Lit stories. She gave a whole new meaning to "BTB"...burn the bastard!

And she did it without messing up his ability to have to pay child support.

I loved the writing in this story. Especially appreciate that the main character was going to give their child up for adoption rather than have an abortion. Loved the attitude portrayed.

Disagree with comment that the woman was stupid - She was manipulated. David and Evie really weren't very good friends.

End of the story kind of "petered out".

Keep writing

mfj

What a dirty trick for a husband to pull on an innocent woman. Something I would never do.but when my girlfriend and I had a disagreement over her dancing with I considered too many different men two were black. She was telling me that she would probably go to another party with them. Blowing off her mouth as too how much bigger they felt compared to me. I said that great go for it but I would advise you to make sure they use protection and get tested afterwards. They both have been on the contact list from whores that they have been with. Plus I know for a fact that both is paying child support. You have make a wonderful choice your parents will be proud. I walked away.

It's a great story. I would have preferred more BTB approach, but you justified taking a softer route ih a believable way so 5 stars

Great story—loved all but the very end, and I can’t say why. Just didn’t have the very warm feeling of the rest.

Keep writing!

Bill

Tone perfect. An absolutely wonderful story. I am curious about your protagonist's name. Marie Wolcott - doesn't seem a name that would jump to the forefront of a storyteller. I knew a Marie Wolcott once when I lived in Michigan years ago. I have no idea why but I am able to easily place her into this character you so beautifully carved.

I am thrilled to have just now discovered your writing. I look forward to reading many more of your stories. You possess a rare talent. One final thought - I absolutely love smart and strong women characters. Your Marie was that and more.

This is a story of a woman that was really stupid. But I guess if she was smart in the first place Chapter 2 couldn't have happened and 3 and 4 wouldn't went the way they did. A lot of imagination thought went into this story line. As they use to say on The Smothers Brothers, "very interesting".

Well written, good plot and highly believable characters, really pleased I found your work. It really is very good. Thank you.

Not too many times am I surprised with stories in this category but this one was perfect, as other commenters have said. I echo their approval and appreciation of your writing skills, I hope to read more of your stories soon. Thank You 5*****

So I was wrong about Evie. Ok story

Enjoyed

We read many of these stories where the wife is the cheater and the husband gets his revenge. I think Cliff got off easy. Great story. A 5 Star Rating.

Perfect

Perfect

when you can't justify her being a slut, find away to blame the husband.

What a great story!

It is so refreshing to read a story from a female perspective about the husband cheating, and then burning the bastard. Well done.

Good writing, excellent grammar and punctuation, and a completely wonderful story. I adore your plot twists, I appreciate the depth you include while not including too much drivel, and I certainly look forward to reading you more!

A new favorite author and story!

She fucks up the narrative then figures out how to blame the husband...of course make him weak in the process

I love a good ending. She got what she and her son deserved in terms of money.

I have reservations about letting the kid know his sperm Donner just because of knowing what kind of man h is. It was nice to know she was exercising both sides or all of her new found sexual adventures. The EMT guy might be just what she needs. Great Read. Can't wait to read more of your works.

and threatened him with jail to get as much cash as possible

although i do think someone as morally decrepid as ivan is written, should be never allowed near children.

But I think a man like Ivan is smarter than that. I think once he gets rid of his wife, he moves. Lock, stock and barrel. I think he changes names and countries. I think she would have had zero chance of ever finding him. And if it did happen and she came back? I think he simply disappears with the kid. He's gone too far and risked too much to simply give up like the story plays out. Fairly good story completely ruined by an unbelievable ending.

Five Stars. This series hit it out of the park.

what was in the air when she emphasised that the baby was white. Why shouldn't he be? Well of course on this site the other guy had to be black and of course had to have a huge dong. (Some observers say that isn't always the case -- eg those who have served in the army etc., but we mustn't forget where we are.)

Not really explained, in spite of everything why hubby set that up -- to "justify" his own affair which was already progressing? Talk about setting himself up for a fall. As someone else said, why oh why are white guys always portrayed as wimps who want their wives to fuck black?

I think the whole story was designed to allow the scream of outrage at the end, where the hubby makes the stupid offer to "allow" her back (against the background of his by then clear deception), so she could rebuff his obviously useless and self-serving offer.

But, hey, no mention that the baby might actually need to have a real father rather than just a male sperm donor, notwithstanding his character flaws. No chance of a climb-down from the moral outrage to allow for that.... well of course not.

But Patricia writes well and with real insights as to how the female storyteller was feeling. Quite liked the lesbian interlude -- if that is how a woman might behave in that situation.

You got My Endorsement. ..Told well, written well, and You got Her vengeance on Her Ex...Anyway that's my Comment 5 ★ ★ ★ ★ ★ WOOF

great story loved it all keep them coming

First time read so each chapter took a different turn! Surprising and fun!

excellent story, as always. thank you!

But the reality? Ivan quit his job and disappeared with all the assets, including the fact that he had taken a second mortgage out on the house which was now under water. She came away with nothing but bills. Ivan moved out of the country and lived the high life, never to be seen again.

Really loved it.

I've seen some of the comments that are common to "Loving Wives" genre. Maybe Literotica should come up with more categories. Like "Loving Husbands". And "Revenge". People sure get worked up about cheating wives, but not so much about cheating husbands.

Anyway, good story.

"I thought it would be a one-time shot and then I would find a way to make it all up to you without you ever knowing why.” – Gee, sounds like so many of the cheating wives here!

"You mean, now that Laura has dumped you,” – I think you mean “Lynn”!

Please ignore the trolls who can't take a little variety!

Nice revenge without being all Burn The Bastard.

I liked it.....bill

5ssss

This was ok. A few things bothered me though. When I was young and stupid I woke up one morning wondering how the hell did I get back home because the last thing I remember was walking into the party and hearing the host say "Hey man, you've got to try this shit". I may not have remembered a damn thing (and still don't to this day) but I sure as hell knew I had been drugged! So naturally, I don't buy her being so accepting to Ivan's bullshit. When you don't remember anything, you sure as hell don't feel guilty! If I had been accused of something that night, they would have had a hard time convincing me, and if they did, I still wouldn't have felt guilty because I knew I wasn't responsible for my actions.

Next, it may just be my hard luck, but in my experience, women aren't anywhere near as calm and even tempered as Marie. I can't even imagine the scorched earth response to something like this if my wife had been involved. This is about the most hateful trick I've ever heard of and warrants far more payback (may I suggest his dick never function again?) The story read like it happened to someone else.

Still, I enjoyed reading this. I hate cheating and love the stories that don't accept it.

learning to eat pussy and like it. Happens a lot in these stories so it must be something special. Of course, I think it is but I have severe lesbian tendencies myself and always have. Oh well, just something to live with.

Story had a flow to it and was easy to read. I couldn't understand why the guy would do something like that, but hey, it's LW world and people are allowed, no, encouraged to be stupid with all of their blood in their own particular sex organ. Thanks for sharing your talent with us and for the time you spend on it.

Nice to have a story about a women with those figurative "balls".

Thats a great story. I love when its the guy who gets fucked, To many stories about the woman being the slut

It is just a story. Does not matter whether she would have won or not. get real and just enjoy it! 5 stars - wish it could be more. I loathe people who read stories and them gripe about any mistakes and errors!!

are bent. Their victims are easy to set up because by and large, the innocent don't look for scheming and deceit.

It is great to see her get her revenge. As far as I'm concerned, the asshole doesn't even deserve to meet his son... he may be a bad influence.

A fun tale. Lynne deserved more than she got though too. Anybody who will mess with a half of another couple are the lowest of the low.

By the way, I am male, and usually BTB, but just because the ones in the wrong on this story site are more often than not the women. It's the cheats I really hate.

Simple to prove kid is his.

Plenty of testimony to his deceptions.

I just didn't see him folding his tent. She simply didn't have enough evidence to stand up in a Court of Law and get anything over turned. And had he been worried, I think he would have packed up and left before she could do anything. That's just the type of man he was. So I think she still lost as pertains to Ivan. He got away scott-free. She did improve her lot and went on to live a good life. She just didn't get anything from Ivan.

She had proof! Sworn statements from Lynn and David!

Good story...Thanks!

But you didn't convince me for a single second that she would have won anything in a court of law. She lost. He was a dick. It happens. I don't see it ending the way you wrote it.

Improbable storyline. The ex-wife really had nothing concrete. He would have laughed in her face and thrown her out.

I bloody loved this story... brilliant. I've seen some comments about 'proof' and all that sort of baloney.... stupid, really stupid. This is a story and the outcome was natural justice.... a deserved payback, so that's good, what? As for reasons of the story not holding together because of proof or whatever.... it's a story... hell 90% of Hollywood productions (as to real events) are so far out of whack with what really happened as to make them laughable in real terms..... BUT, they are good stories, what?

Good read, thanks patricia51.

She didn't have enough proof of so many things. A judge would have laughed her out of court. She can't PROVE anything. At least not for a court of law. Her case is built on smoke and mirrors. And if she did start legal proceedings all he had to do was threaten to request a DNA test for the kid. Does she REALLY want to have shared custody? I don't think so. SO she knows what she knows and there's nothing to be done about it but move on. Which means this whole story was an exercise in the ridiculous.

You write the best stuff! Your feeling for the sensitivity of the characters and the ability to put those feelings into words, is marvelous!

Thank you for this one, and all of the others as well..

Other than that, it was a good closure for the story. Although I would have been tempted to cause Ivan a little more pain. Maybe some alimony? How about planting your foot between his legs - hard?

It sounds like his own guilt and regret will be his biggest punishment. Excellent writing as usual. Thanks.

It's so nice to see things from the other side. The vast majority of these loving wives stories are written from the perspective of a cheated husband but, let's be honest, for every cheating wife there is a cheating husband. Maybe more cheating husbands? It's good to see the cheating husbands get clobbered for a change.

Good story, nicely written. Thanks, I enjoyed it.

A very good story,to bad you did not do more to him,step on his ball"s.

and loved every minute of it. You are one of the great writers on here. I usually stay in the Lesbian category but I find myself following a good author wherever their stories go.

Thanks for sharing.

IDB.

I dont like cheaters and they should all be treated like shit. I think she did a good job and still has alot to deal with because of the pain he caused, but she did a good job by leaving him.

I give the author credit for not letting the tale get out of hand. Marie was married to a cheating asshole and she moved on with her life quite nicely. Well done.

Tho' this is an old story and the 2nd time I've read it, I still think it was marvelously written. I liked the slow setup and was set back at the shock of the 'event' you provided in place of a 'bait'. I couldn't decide if the heroine's decision to leave was courage or cowardice, but somehow wasn't surprised at the 'switch'. The conclusion was escape-proof, final, and pleasantly satisfying. Well done.

SPLENDID!

I commend your grasp of the written word. Unlike some of your other commenters, although they are 'spot on', I feel no need to get into the details of this dream you have so elegantly presented for our pleasure.

I enjoyed it and would have given it a 4.25, but alas they don't rate that way. None the less, please submit another work. It has been a long time. You have a feminine side that few can compare but that many may benefit from. Personally, I would have appreciated it if you had somehow developed Cliff's character and his relationship with his mother more fully.

She never cheated!

She made it all up to make her dumb ex feel some of the pain he had given her.

Even if she had gotten with David, she's divorced now, so there is nobody to cheat on... but SHE DIDN'T DO IT!!!

Read it again. You owe Pat more stars.

5 from me for the series, though I knew who the bad guy was from the first part, and knew she was set up.

I didn't care for the way you took this fourth chapter. He cheated and then she cheated, no winner in this, and a one star from me. Now, just because I didn't like the story doesn't mean that you aren't a good writer,,,,you are a good writer !

he did her wrong and she stayed, left and came back stronger. TK U MLJ LV NV

Like the single star said "I hated it", and how I rated it.

Would you consider finishing the story, and show her life as she gets older. Thank you. She certainly was bkindsided. :(

Very nice.

Good role reversal. There have been several other stories along this line since this one was written, but it seems to happen only to the husband. I agree with the commenter that says doing this to one's spouse is stupid. It's like committing a murder with someone elses help. You cannot count on keeping it a secret if someone else knows what you did. Still, I like that this is about the cheating man instead of the cheating wife. But you have stupified the women bashers. To them a story is no good unless it's about righteous men being wronged by a lying slut. No matter how many years she spent being a loving and faithful wife. Oh well, so goes Loving wives stories.

Weird plots is what keeps it interesting. Thanks for sharing.

If I weren't so darned lazy, I would have written this and more before this. You write darned well, believably, sensitively, compassionately, and intellegently. There are none of the gross, juvenile, or immature mistakes that so often accompany the writings that I find here. I am 70 yrs old now and I am ashamed of what our society chooses to call and education. It always bouys me up when I find a pearl like yourself. I enjoy sexy sensuality as an adjunct to good story. Perhaps I am a bit of a Lech :O But I very much enjoy good stories such as I find from you and from "Alexys Quinn." Please keep on doing you thing as it is greatly appreciated.

You don't "have to" write any more as you have every right to rest on you literaty laurelsl. But! I certainly, selfishly, hope you do :) - - - Lynn

Good story except it would be more believable if the couple would switch places.

I.E, she would be cheating as usually happens and him suffering, unless he got big balls and killed both cheaters on the spot.

That would make more sence than the manhating drivvel this scribe produced

from the beginning this story posed a challenge to me. the writing was superb and very articulate. the word choice believable, and the flow of the story excellent. however, the plot was transparent and very predictable. you crafted the characters well and solid, made their emotions believable and yet some how drained the story itself of emotions. I am not sure how you accomplished this as it is the first time i have ever ran into such a successful development of character emotions in an emotionless story. i will spend quite some time analyzing this to figure that out. i find upon reflection that i must congratulate you on such an unusual, if unintended, twist. and say very good job, you truly blindsided me with it. yes i mean that statement in a positive way as i found this work fascinating from a writers perspective as well as a reader perspective.

now as i have noted before i believe in keeping feed back on content separate from feed back on the writing itself. i like that this story used a false story of revenge sex to accomplish the same ends... it retains the dignity of the victim to a degree while proving just what an idiot the bad guy is. the lesbian scene that seems to have some people in an uproar while was not necessary to the story could have added a very real touch of humanity to it had the details been more vague and more of the emotion had been said of the emotions. it there for will stand as a positive in my eyes for the story as well as the diversity the writer is willing to employ. the inter racial segment that also seems to have some folks in a fit while again not necessary to the story could have added some interesting twists had it been handled slightly different. i am very glad the writer did not use them that way except for a tad bit at the end. while the wife could have gotten more from her husband, i am pleased that she was fairer than he would have been. it keeps her on the higher moral grounds that she has achieved. i however would not have even hinted that the husband have time with the child. but that is just my own view there are many more out there.

and finally my next comment is directed to other readers. it is never ok to judge a piece of writing with out finishing it as you never know what will be said between beginning and end to change the view. I know it is easier to hate than to wait, but it is shameful to blast some one needlessly when if you had waited to the end you would have seen that all had changed. also once again i see more comments concerning content alone with out considering the writing of the story that is very sad, a writer grows more from feedback on the writing than on feedback on their content. one can write well on any subject even dull ones or one can write poorly on the most exciting controversy.

and to one slime in particular, i am appalled that you would say such hateful things as comments to a story of fiction. it shows that you are even less than an animal yourself (animals have an excuse for rude behavior, natural instincts and no free will)i am willing to bet dollars to donuts that the only reason you are brave enough to say what you have is because no one knows who you are, where you live, and there are no big guys around with a different opinion. coward.

i give the story a five... why you might ask? simple, i am enjoying the challenge it has presented me very much.

SunFiresDancer

I could not find any logical sense in what he did - even after reading other people's comments. Maybe I think to straight...

Good thing it was an Early delivery.. or she would still be living with Shame and Guilt fon No Reason. Damn nice of her to let Ivan know he could have the kid for a week-end or a week when it gets Old Enough.

is the second worst thing a man can get. The first is an ex-loving wife's contempt. You always make me wonder what's gonna come next in your stories and I really like the sensitive characters you build for your heroes or heroines. I just can't understand your obsession - or should I call it fetish? - with police and army.

Great story. I like the way you developed the plot. It is nice to read stories that have some erotic features and don't center on sex and only sex.

Pat that was a moving and enjoyable story its a shame she couldnt over look his mistakes even women have done worse than ivan she should have considered that before she dropped the bomb on him that way she could have given Ivan a 6months trial to see if he changes his ways if not she could go elsewhere.

Pat M.

Atlanta,Ga.

having a good life is still the best revenge.

Look I Loved the story. I loved the writing !!! I loved the plot and the strong woman aspect.

My Grandmother was an attorney and My Mom teaches Constitutional Law at seton hall Unversity... and my wife is better educated than I.

so I love the strong woman thing

But the problem is that in EVERY one of Paricia51 stories the Husband ALWAYS take the whore wife back.

EVERY single story...

where is the fair play? when you keep in mind that Patricia 51 has always shown the men to be sad stupid pathetic creatures ... see her Rainy Day Rubdown", and "Tom's Story",

then the LESBIAN act in this story well its clear what Patricia51's REAL agenda is

You're a excellent writer and I enjoy your stories. I didn't like this as much as some of your other stories, but I did enjoy it. I do think the characters and the situations needed to be expanded. I felt this was done in RPSUCH's story and I think your story needed more. Not a perfect score for me but you rated high. Thanks again for the words and your time writing them.

I have to agree with the comments of Landrious1 and add my congratulations on a fine piece of writing. You did a superb job of describing the pain that Marie felt and her subsequent actions to rebuild her life. , I also think she let Ivan off too easily, castration should be mandatory in such cases. Great work Patti!

A fine story by an outstanding author that graphically portrays the devastation infidelity causes. This is a slice of real life--a thoughtful and deep exploration into the emotional impact of willful betrayal instead of a typical slut-husband/wimp-wife story. I like the reversal of roles in this story compared to the normal fare in this genre of loving (cheating) wives. Actually, there aren't enough serious stories out here about husbands who stray. I, for one, would like to see more of them. Kudos, Patricia.

wow what a story, the sad thing is he may have trully loved her but his cheating and lying destoried it all

Nice writing. You did a wonderful job of describing the anguish that Marie felt and the description of her susequent actions to establish an independent life ,sans Ivan, for herself and her child. As a female chauvinist, with three daughters, I think she let Ivan off too easily. I was hoping she would castrate the bastard and/or have him jailed, but it's your story and as a non-writer, I would not presume to tell you how to write. Great writing though. 60 year old George

There was a lot I wanted to say but Sherlock40 beat me to it. The only thing left to say is: Thank you for posting the chapters close togather.

The needs from an acknowledged talented writer are perhaps too high at times. We are all human and thus 1 day can be better or worse than another.

Having enjoyed almost all your non-lesbian work - these last two were not up to the or my usual expectations for the reasons previously cited.

It isn't as though you aren't appreciated in large part as you are but the expectations are stronger of you than many others. It that fair? Perhaps or perhaps not in every case.

In a non-professional setting you are very strong and appreciated on average - just not as much on the last two but by the same token I am looking forward to your next.

Personally I don't think the prick should be let anywhere near HER child unsupervised. But that's just me. :) This was a good story in that the truth won out. The emotional torture he put her through to cover up his own lack of honor and moral character is in my opinion unforgivable. I would have gotten the lawyer disbarred at the very least as he evidently skipped the ethics portion of law school. Again this is my reactions in Reality!

Your ending is quite satisfactory. I loved it and I’m glad you have her looking forward to life.

There is a certain class of Lit reader who as soon as he runs up against a statement or paragraph that leads him in a direction that he doesn't like. will bag the story, 1 bomb it, give an offense comment, and move on.

These people are idiots.

Any reader who has experience with Patti's stories knows that how it begins is often no indicator of how it is going to end. So the wife tells Ivan that she had an affair with Dave, who is black. Like one paragraph later she says it is all a lie.

One would think that these readers would have the perseverence to go on for just another paragraph or two to see if the author might have a twist in the narrative. I've had a couple stories bombed by people who never got past the first paragraph and judged it by entirely inaccurate criteria. Same goes here.

Readers, with patricia51, have a little patience. It will not go unrewarded.

the same story I did? I read a story about a loving wife that was emotionally abused and set up by a lying, cheating, contemptible husband who wanted to cover up his own affair. I saw a woman, who when she found out she was pregnant and thinking it was by another man, left her old life in disgrace believing those things her crappy husband had said about her. I saw a woman drawing comfort from a friend. Maybe she went too far with it, but in her state of mind she shouldn't be blamed for wanting a little tenderness. I read a story about a woman that had to go through giving birth and in doing so grew emotionally too. I saw a woman grow strong in will and decide that she wasn't going to be run off from her family and friends by her asshole husband. And finally I saw a cheating husband take it up the shorts for treating her this way.

I have liked most of your stories and I certainly liked this one. The only ones of your stories that I didn't like were the stories where the wife cheats on the husband with another woman. Cheating is cheating, no matter whom it is with. It doesn't help and it certainly doesn't enhance a marriage.

Like someone stated, this is a double standard. I don't remember correctly but i think the wife didn't get tested for a few days, and i am sure that the drugs would have left her system by than. Also, she can't make the husband pay here anything, the divorce is final and as they say, that is the end of that. As for pressing charges, there is no evidence of anything, all she has is heresay. Hell, he can pay a few people to lie on his behalf stating that they had seen his wife with davied on more than one occasion. He can even pay a coworker of his wife to say that his wife told her that she was having an affair. It would be the same thing, all would be heresay. How would the judge know who is really telling the truth.

The characters in this story were dumb and dumber.

It appears the author had written the conclusion first and tried painstakingly to write backwards to fit the ending..

I'm sorry to say...she failed miserably.