All Comments on 'Broke Bully Pt. 01'

I love the tone you've setup here.

There's a toothyness to it. Like this isn't anger, its malice. That resonates with the feeling I have thinking back to the, shit times I had back in high school (Which wasn't that bad in all honesty). But its enough that I understand whats it is and where it comes from and that makes it feels authentic.

I think this piece of Erotica has potential. The domination sequences feel strong and they're very sexual (One of the worst things Erotica can do is pretending they're some type of literary masterpiece) but i feel like there's a lack of buildup.

Everything happens incredibly fast, we haven't seen any proof of the MC being bullied in his high school years neither we've seen the slave act like it