All Comments on 'Brother and Sister Get Closer Pt. 03'

You need to write more then one page at a time. By doing a page at a time is a waste of time for the readers.

main vein muscle? Are you sure you're old enough to be on this site. You really need someone to proofread your stories. 1*

Even though I often run down people who post comments anonymously, I have to agree with both of these previous comments completely.

A plethora of mistakes and sometimes childish narrative thrown in. The format is horrible. 1/5