All Comments on 'Caged Pt. 04'

This is a very good story and I’m looking forward to where it take us. I can see you need a (very) little help in the editing department and would like to offer my services. I know what I want out of a story but am not creative enough to write my own. I am handy with a red pen, however, and can help streamline yours if you’ll allow. I had to reregister since I haven’t logged on in so long and am waiting for the moderators to approve. I’ll email you when my account is active.

I am still looking forward to the slave to understanding that she is slave. By giving her a description of what his brother would do verses what he doing to her he is bending her to possibly thinking that he is not as bad and deceiving her in what master is capable of breaking her. Be careful of using "whipping" for "wiping". There are a couple of times when master is wiping her hair or wiping things down when the word "whipping" is used.

I still like the aftercare that master is showing his new slave. As she experiences slavery the trust that builds between them will allow her to reach her limits and have master be able to push her a little more past those limits without permanently damaging her. Finally maybe she will get some real food? I don't remember when the last time she ate anything except some drugged oatmeal with some water after the auction. Also, it just came to me that he said that they had spoken at some other time?

I find this captivating. A literal page turner. Keep up the good work!

K

This has potential and I appreciate the evocative focus on her sensations. I think it needs more editing for spelling and grammar: there were a lot of missing commas, and you used "whipping" instead of "wiping" multiple times, as well as:

"He grabbed my arm squeezing a little tightly, his long strands made it hard to keep up with him as we walked towards my new prison". Make sure to read it over to notice typos like "strands"!

Good beginning. I like your descriptions of the dynamic between master and slave and their feelings... Will he get only her body or can he get her mind, heart and soul?

Keep writting, it's good!Thank you👍👍👍👍👍

I’m so excited that was so great that made me feel so submissive and happy aaahhhhhh you’re a really great writer I’m excited for part 5!!!!!!!!

So far I havent been able to stop reading this story. I cant wait til there is more...much more of it written for us readers. It is really very good. I am not someone who is easily amused either but i do love this story. Please hurry with the next chapter. Thank you.

Very good job pulling us into the story. Can't wait to find out what happens next. Thank you!!!!!!

Please tell me you’re going to update this

Need to know what happens next! I’m very choosy when it comes to stories, so I’d be disappointed if this one were to go unfinished. I’m guessing the brother is going to try getting his way with her & probably none too gently either, which is sure to anger her rightful Master! More, please!! 🥺

Would love to read more!

More pls 🥺

I hope you one day continue this story, it has a lot of potential and for once is a well thought out noncon story. I do hope she still puts up a fight against him and doesn't fold too easily.

Would love toread more!! Would be great to see her leave the house and run. And captor run after her and catch her. And she have a breakdown and captor comfort her and tell her that it is her house and that they will be happy together.

Please update soon!!!

Love this so far!! Would be great to see her leave the house and run. And captor run after her and catch her. And she have a breakdown and captor comfort her and tell her that it is her house and that they will be happy together. Hope the stockhlom syndrome will be slow and that he will slowly break her

Please update soon!! 🤎🩵💚🤍🤎🩶🥰🥰😍😍😍😘😘😘🥰

Hope that the stockhlom syndrome will be slow and she try to escape. Would be great to see her try to escape from him and get caught and punished. And after the punishment cuddling, aftercare..