All Comments on 'Call Girl Changed My Life Pt. 05'

I am enjoying the story line. The writing is well executed. My only critical comment would be that the dialogue is a bit saccharine. I know the MC is new to relationships, heck his only relationship, but calling Beth "honey" all the time and declaring their undying love for each other every 3rd sentence is a bit much. Otherwise quite enjoyable. You have talent

Nestorb30 I appreciate your comment, and I'm glad you're enjoying the series. As to your criticism, it's a fair assessment. I would defend by saying as you've said, it's all new to Eric, and he's been starved for affection for a long time. So I think it's natural for him to be kind of mushy and for Beth to feed off that and give him what he needs. She's a very affectionate person as well. And my wife and I, together almost 25 years now, always call each other by our pet names when we're alone.

I liked the story line and the characters. I hope you continue this story as I'm interested. Thanks for your time and imagination.

Thanks for a fantastic love story.

What a well written love story, but to make it perfect you need to bring to a much more detail conclusion, the wedding between Eric and Beth, Eric having plastic surgery to repair his face, so may places this could go. Well done 5 stars

Please, Please finish this storyline. I have enjoyed it very much but feel that it is easily 4 or 5 chapters from completion.

You are a gifted story teller and it would be a shame to leave this one unfinished.

I had the same thought as nestor30, but with Eric being inexperienced, i kept having to remind myself of that.

I will say I was pleased with the handling of Ch. 5. i do not generally enjoy incest stories. However, it was a good approach.

PLEASE write another instalment.

I want to see Beth and Eric get married!

Also, a reconciliation of Beth and her disapproving family members might be a difficult storyline to attempt, but well worth the effort to help Beth's emotional healing and relieve her of that emotional baggage.

- And we haven't even been to the bris!

Mazel tov!