All Comments on 'Campbell’s Genie Pt. 01'

Some fairly novel ideas here coupled with fun writing, a nice read. Keep an eye out for typos though and try to explore how to add more detail to make it more immersive.

Hey great story. keep it coming!!!

Super hot, thanks!

I'm sorry that this will sound rude and really is meant to be constructive, but you SERIOUSLY need an editor. A lot of the wording is awkward or barely fits with the rest, but the story is nice and isn't as cliche as expected. Good story, not so good wording. Work on that and your stories will be great

Please get an editor. It seems that as soon as you get to an important or sex related part, you start to misspell and even forget words. This would be so much better with someone editing it for you.

Grammar Nazis are the worst. If your mind can't adapt to fix and correctly read the literature who really has the problem here?