All Comments on 'Camped Out'

This is an episode of 'NAKED AND AFRAID' no one will ever see!

This is barely english. It could have been a good story, but you murdered it.

Good but needs addtl chapters

The idea behind the story is sound but the grammar is so bad it is difficult to follow at times. Would be a lot better with proper english..

A proofreader or editor is seriously needed to tidy this up a little... Perhaps even a bit more of a logical reason the 'nest' is not disturbed, since some jackass will unless legally bound (even then...). More pacing control is needed too. The story jerks and rushes on with shameless porn logic, then pretends it isn't.

Loved it