Can We Be Saved

A good story focuses on a couple, possibly three or four characters, but this one felt like Tolstoy at times, and everything was always in motion. It needs a 10K-15K word edit to unclutter it, speed up the pacing and make it readable.

I really did not like this. As others expressed I got a little ways into it and knowing the author's proclivity I stopped and went to the end which met my expectations based on his other stories. So sad for a good writer to do this.

Stopped reading this either page 3 or 4, don't remember. Nor care. 10 pages, the last being 1 line, Too drawn out, so expressing to page 9, I found that she got pregnant. Or I think so. Some was hard to follow. Dorothy, playing with this guy's penis, just to rile her husband up? Then she gets angry when he leaves?

---> 1st, she shouldn't be doing that at all, & the guy's wife is a dunce for agreeing with it. 2nd, for an intelligent woman, she's a few nuts & bolts short in her brains by listening to this female empowering councellor & her ideas. Including the tattoo, which wound up being temporary.

----> Then there's the shit of "it's my body...". OK, yes, it's your body. But in marrying, you can't dictate access to your spouse not say you can do anything & throw that up several times. You disrespect me like that, after the humiliation with her so-called friends, the response is "then I can do whatever I want. Here's your divorce, because your actions of late & words tell me you've already cheated on me. So now I've freed both of us to be with whomever we want."

---> I didn't read of some of the things written about by the commenters below as that's likely part of my skipping. Again, too long, too drawn out, that I sometimes lost track of what character I'm reading about. 2 stars Bob

I believe the whole last 4 or 5 chapters were all wrong. First off we found out that the baby wasn't his, and instead of all this Fantasy play, she turned him in to a chastity caged cuckold. Because that is how the first half of this story was Written. So it just doesn't make sence..

Long story. Her reaction to the fertility test and not talking to her husband but sticking with a man-hatijg counselor was odd. After page 4, skip to page 9, realizing she got pregnant along the way. This story was bloated. Some of the early stuff with Sarah the counselor was ok.

I had to stop at about page 5, and then cut to 9 to see the ending. This story sucked, because the plot absolutely made zero sense. A married couple, have sex 100’s, maybe 1000’s of times with protection, before attempting to have a baby. If wifey was told she was fertile, she would have immediately asked hubby to get tested as well. Her reaction to her being found fertile, was infantile, at its best. And him working long hours in his own business? Most 20 year old women WISH they could find a guy, who has a business, work ethic and a future. IF you are to believe this story, the husband needs to cut his losses and get a divorce, BEFORE the Narcissist wannabe has kids to hold over him, in the divorce.

Good riddance.

Basically a bunch of bullshit with a supposed man who really is the cuckold we all knew he was

Degenerated into a series of sex encounters and role playing after page 4.

too long, too much sex, no conflict resolution with Dorothy's "new friends or her therapist and clinic. Also, think it was page 4 where they first have sex again after her betrayal, she wants her to eat her pussy? Totally wrong, should be him in charge demanding a blowjob or just taking her. So, first 4 pages were conflict and breaking point in a marriage, most of next 6 pages were just sex for no good reason. Overall, a good story

Would have been a very good story if you had kept it to about 1/3 the llength.