All Comments on 'Canada 2128 - Ch. 02 Slavery Begins'

Kind of hot, but dire and raw. I'm not sure I like the way she is treated. Maybe some cocaine and heroin will help. If you want a slut, win her over by her wanting to be one, with rewards, not punishment. Just like a dog.

Anonymous, thank you for your thoughts. Rewards and punishment can both be erotic. I’ll certainly incorporate some of both here.

The Mistress forgets that a hopeless person also has nothing to live for, and might end up doing something desperate. Escape, suicide or murder spring to mind (I'd probably go with murder, but I'm just not very forgiving I guess). As the first commentor intimates, you catch more bees with honey than vinegar.

Gortmundy, thank you for for sharing your thoughts. Not being an accomplished writer, I’m just going by the seat of my pants in trying to created a state of inner conflict for Darla, the sex slave. Conflict in whether she should be complaint, or, begin to defy her situation and her mistress. Hopefully my writing skills will improve as the story continues where Darla’s inner conflict and their relationship experience peaks and valleys towards a yet to be determined conclusion.

Your writing skills are fine, its a great story. My comment was more about my personal feelings about such things than your storytelling.