by Sleepyowl
Another wasted first time story. So glad I skimmed. It's obvious that English is not your first language, you sound like the guy who works third shift at seven/eleven. If you want people to read your stories learn how to write/speak properly.
I honestly let a few things pass, but referencing "her figure she'd voyeur" is where I couldn't any more. It makes no sense!
Too bad he didn't fill her unprotected pissy with love pee and make her a mommy, then his wife. He told her he loved her,and she'd probably enjoy being a mother...
I get a kick out of these ass hats that critique, yet don't have the balls to put there name to their comments, or put a story out there to be critiqued. I thought it was a great story. Keep up the good work, and don't pay attention to the ass hats.