All Comments on 'Carmen's Roommate Issues 01'

Proof read before submitting your stories. There are a lot of dropped words, really a lot.

Perhaps you could read it aloud, to yourself. This would present the opportunity for these untyped words to appear.

Your style is well above a lot of what I see here and you demonstrate tremendous potential. The lack of a little more depth kept me from rating this story above average. Had I not had to guess what you might be implying (it's only a story anyway) I would have rated this higher.