All Comments on 'Carnal Desire Ch. 03'

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Anonymousabout 3 years ago

Some minor grammatical and spelling mistakes in this one, but the biggest one that I saw (and lol'd at) was on page 1. It's where Jordan is talking about Sydney and why she's so great and you say "innocents" instead of it correctly being "innocence." There were a couple other moments like that. Not distracting but funny in an awkward way.

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