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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 4 years ago
Why

Okay but. Why. Why though. You gloss over so much with just, "I don't know why I did it but I did," repeatedly. You spend so much time trying to set up the premise of the setting through casual exposition, and when things actually start to occur, there's no rhyme or reason.

YourObedientServantYourObedientServantalmost 4 years agoAuthor
Thanks!

Genuinely, thanks for the feedback. The answer is that I am not very good at building tension at the best of times; and I wrote this horny.

Lobosolo51Lobosolo515 days ago

Such potential, but you did not develop it - so I rated you a 3.

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I have previously written stories, often paired to pictures, and posted as depravednerd.tumblr.com I recently wrote another and decided to post that here, in light of Tumblr's decidedly puritanical streak these days, and work on moving over my other stories. And just for not...