All Comments on 'Ceremony of Rebirth'

Your descriptive imagery was yummy! Goodluck! :)

~Luna

A creative little story with some hot sex. Good luck in the contest.

The story was very erotic, but it might have made more sense if you had started the story with a paragraph or two introducing the setting and the reason for the ritual. Also, the change in verb tenses in the first couple paragraphs was a bit distracting.