All Comments on 'Chav Sex Ch. 05'

I found the story "choppy" whereby the breaks in time seemed harsh and lacked transition to the next part of the story. Also I found the story to be of a manual of retelling of the experience and did not recreate the experience for the reader. Finally not all readers, especially those outside of the UK, do not understand the term "Chav." "Chav" I believe is analogous to the American term "white trailer trash." Personally I would have rather read a story that accounted for the variation in terminology and took in consideration the variation is word usage.

Thanks for the feedback. Good to understand what readers think.

Regarding the word "Chav", I made a concious decision to keep the dialogue and language very British, and typical of the Chav lifestyle - at the risk of alienating some readers. Cognisant that not all readers would understand it, I did give a detailed set of definitions at the beginning of Chapter One.

I'm loving this series - I love English/British stories and the correct use of our language - so CHAV it is and it works for me.

I suppose its because there are so many bdsm stories in Lit that there are hardly any comments on this story. This chapter is a bit inventive and unusal, bdsm and incest. Interesting how the narrator is a dom and gets taught a thing or two by the patriach of the family. I think most of my fav writer are connected to England. Truth and love, ynhumiliator and ladyjane, among others. Even when other authors dont say theyre english, I know when I see words like wank, snogging, knickers, etc. Authors from the UK sure are kinky.