All Comments on 'Chipping At The Wall'

Fantastic story, you definitely need an editor for grammar and punctuation, but the story itself is great. Looking forward to more!

Great story so far

yes part 2 and danny gets a beating for trying to assault jenny

Maybe make Danny be the bitch boy. Treat him like a ho, pimp him out as small dic guy

SO BADLY WRITTEN IT'S PRACTICALLY UNREADABLE, COULDN'T GET HALF WAY DOWN THE FIRST PAGE BEFORE GIVING UP

Thanks for feedback and support, MadVin. Hopefully, i can get an editor for my next piece.

Lovely story. It becomes very difficult to trust anyone after having your trust betrayed. Some are able to recover, some never do. Loved the characters. Madhav, our sweet Indian man in a foreign land, and Jenny, a broken hearted romantic afraid to love again.

The grammar does get a bit wierd at times. Hopefully you can find someone to help out with it as suggested by MadVin. But irrespective, I really enjoyed the story. Eager to see what happens next in the next chapter. I only hope that it doesn't take a dark turn with Danny's return. He's a scumbag and does not deserve Jenny.

Very sweet love story. Good job.

Thank you, a great story

Good pace and lovely written

I’m officially following now in hopes you continue your stories ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️