I nearly stopped reading the story entirely due to chapter 11 it was so bad I didn't read more than a couple paragraphs and skipped the rest. Leave that kind of garbage in the trash where it belongs.
I took to writing erotica for the reason that I would have sole control on how the story ends and what my characters will do. However I was surprised to see that some characters have a mind of their own and act accordingly beyond my original intentions. Case in point were Lind...