All Comments on 'Choose Your Adventure'

Great start! Keep them coming!

You have a lot of possibilities set up. Please keep exploring.

Felt too rushed and in definite need of editing. That said, story has plenty of potential if you can slow ur roll and flesh things out more so they're not so flat/two-dimensional. Please try reading the story out loud b4 u do your final edit and submit any further chapters/stories. Best wishes and good luck.

What a nice place to visit.

A good start. It seem to me that you rushed through it. Slow down some and explain what's going on not only physical but through Amelia's mind. Let's see what happens next in the next chapter. 4 stars for this one.

Pappasleaze!