by UnpublishedEroticaWriter
You don't have to use a different verb after every piece of dialogue. It's super distracting, and made the story unreadable
Oh, ho, ho!!! You are a very funny writer; this last page made me laugh out loud...my wife asked me what is so funny, I just pointed at the screen!
I am going to look at your story page...is there a sequel?? If not, I AM GONNA BE VERY DISAPPOINTED!!
FIVE**5**STARS-excellent read, looking for more in the future!
@MADDOGINTEXAS Was it the sea cow line? I have taken this story as far as it can go. Most of my stories are just one and done. I do have many other interesting, original, funny stories you might also enjoy. Thank you for your positive comment.
need to edit. example - Cassie "laminated" should have been Cassie "lamented" - actual story quite entertaining. keep up the good work.