All Comments on 'College Paper'

Love the way you were detailing their story! So much fun navigating relationships and sex and everything it entails. Hot!

Good premise.

But simply not erotic.

Just a list of things done. No tension. No details. Just rushed.

Three stars.

Kind of a report, but definitely no Story.

Nodding your head means yes. Shaking your head means no. You got it backwards. The boyfriend asked the girlfriend if she was sure, and you said she shook her head despite her answer being yes.

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Going back and forth between a woman's clit and her anus is a surefire recipe for horrible vaginal infections, urinary tract infections, and foul odors. That's the reason women wipe front to back after urinating - to avoid infection.

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It was confusing that you kept calling a cabin a camp. It wasn't a camp, and nobody was camping. They went to a cabin.

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I admit I didn't finish it. The story wasn't erotic. The storytelling was too far removed from the parts that are supposed to be interesting.