All Comments on 'Could You Be Mine?'

Just goes to show we are all capable of falling in love , it just takes the right person to come along.

Beautifully written love story with a hot and sexy ending.

Thank you for sharing this with us

I have loved most of the stories you have written. I have read some, a few times. I just love the romance and love instead of just sex.

I would have preferred more romance and a bit of drama before the happily ever after.

However, I love most of your stories because I am a sucker for happy endings and happily ever after.

I am always looking out for your stories and they are the first I read when stories are published.

Best wishes and I am looking forward to your next one.

Another winner; great way to start the weekend!

I had forgotten all about you, Careythomas. Please forgive me. The last story I read of yours was "Five Years and Four Days," which was a classic. So when I saw your name this morning, my memory flashed back to that story. Your characters are always so delightful that I feel like I'm an invisible man sitting in their presence and enjoying the moment.

Well, the stories it comes up with.. Thanks so much for making my day!!

Xxx

#EPIC

#SERIOUSGOALS

#THISISABSOLUTELIFE!

It was a little long to read at work, but I made it to the end and enjoyed it all the way.

I love that Savage Garden song and i loved this beautiful story. I love love. I love romance and i love a happy ending. And I can't wait for the follow up. Thank you Careythomas. I adore all your stories.

The story is wonderful. Great characters and a wonderful romance. I was half expecting RJ to die in a plane crash on her trip. Hope you continue to write such tremendous stories.

Truly amazing. A slow burn between two wonderful characters paying off in smouldering sex,a red hot attraction, and a deep intense emotional connection. There are people being paid to write erotic romances who don't rite half as well as you. Five stars

first off there was way too much buildup, I mean I like a story that has a good amount of build up, but there is such a thing as too much of it out of 6 pages 5 of them were building it up I skipped over about 3 pages of it, other than that it was alright

At this point I'm certain you'd have to put effort into me not loving your stories to death.

Soooo good. I would live to read another story about these 2.

You are a very talented writer! Your characters and story lines are well developed. I really enjoy the dialogue that you write. Keep writing! I would love to see another chapter of two with these characters.

Love your work.

You gave the characters depth and warmth, made them into an interesting ensemble; well worth the build-up as are most good stories that capture the imagination.

How utterly lovely.

Read it in one go. It's now 2 ock in the morning

I'd say it was cheesy, with all the utterly unrealistic romance, but it is so well written, that I cant deny the pull, and will suspend my disbelief in monogamy for a short while.

Extremely well done, and huge thanks for the effort and talent you put into this lovely story.

Words can’t explain how much I love your stories! Instant romantic classic.

My wallet is open whenever you're ready to offer full-length novels.

Another amazing story. Loved it. Keep it up

One hundred percent honest here.....When I saw your name as the author, I knew that this was going to be an awesome story....Thank you!

Was it cheesy? Perhaps a little bit. Then again, ain’t nothing wrong with a proper romantic love story every now and then, especially if it’s written by you. I loved it. Would love to read a follow up story on these two, however, it’s a great story as is. Considering they did sorta get their happily ever after already. I disagree that the build up was too long. I would rather say that the story ended quite quickly once RJ & Ellie did finally get together. You could’ve drug it out more. All in all great effort! Please keep on writing, you definitely have a gift.

Wow! This really hot me going and going.... Couldn't stop reading till I got to the end..

You’ve delivered a top-drawer story yet again! I loved it! Thank you so much. Never stop writing and sharing with us. Much love and many thanks.

God I love your stories. Every time I see your name in the new category I feel like its Christmas morning and I get to open the present! Then I read and reread your stories till I see your name again. Thank you for your literary visuals you paint. Please keep them coming!

You have yet to disappoint me with your writing ✍️ you are a phenomenal writer

🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟 5 stars ✨ isn’t enough

911, we've got s five-alarm fire here but I don't want you to put it out!

Damn. Really, really, fantastic!

I’ve been reading lit for a while, and this is by far the best story I have ever read

There is absolutely nothing I like about the finance industry and yet this story utterly enraptured me. Thank you for it and I hope so damn much that you are kind enough to share so many more stories like this or like whatever you'd want to write with the world.

I'm searching for words to describe this story, and I am failing. All superlatives! Absolutely one of the best I've ever read on Lit. Thank you so much for writing it!

The other comments have said it all. This story is up there with the very best and deserves all the praise you can get---readers should be throwing stars at you in batches of five. Reading your stories is time well spent and I'm looking forward to more.

Amazingly written and superbly put together! Thank you so much for sharing this with us!

Two words for this story .......BEST EVER

Don't think you could write a poor story if you tried!! A great story, you keep out doing your self,. Thanks

People talk about writing and storytelling as being a craft, but this reminded me that, at its highest level, it is an art form. This is beautifully told, thank you.

I really enjoyed this story. I will probably read it several more times. Thanks for writing it and sharing it with everyone.

Wow, what a fantastic story! I've totally enjoyed all of your stories so far, but I think this one is my favorite. Thank you for sharing it with us!

I think everyone else has already said it all!

Brilliant love story, with wonderful characters, superbly written as ever.

Loved every word and has gone straight into my favourites to be read again.

You have a wonderful style, keep up the good work!

oh wow , what can i say that hasn't already been said . i loved this awesome deeply touching love story . i stayed up so late to finish this 4am ( oops work at 8am ) i'll definitely be reading more of your work. thank you so very much. much love - sarah

Not sure what more can be added to others comments. Didn’t want it to end so please, please, more - and soon.

one of my very favorites. the characters and storyline were perfect. i am sure there will be several more rereads of this story. touched my soul. thank you for putting this in print and sharing. deserves 10 stars.

jan

Carry this is by far one of the best written stories I have read .. You are able to weave a narrative of a slowly running stream. into a raging river of desire and emotion.. thoroughly enjoyed.. I won't mention what it did to my body as I read it.. Luv Donna

I really enjoy it when someone includes a great story with realistic dialogue--not just a pornographic sex romp. Will be checking out some more of your stories!

I've read lots of good stories here on Lit, but this is by far the best! It's the 1st one that moved me so much, I had to comment. Plan on reading all of your stories asap. Great character development, good buildup and believable sex. Hope you plan on a Part2...

This is by far one of the best romance stories I have read on this site. Carey Thomas,

you have the smooth wonderful ability to put great stories together.

I thank very much.... Laura

I just loved this story. I am a Lesbian in a mans body. I loved the developing story and felt it was so real. Just enough sex towards the end. Thank you.

Charlene

I thoroughly enjoy your stories mostly becaue I can relate to your characters. They aren’t perfect. They’re realistic with flaws and do and say dumb embarrassing things like we all do. I feel like they could be people I know and would like. I find them engaging and they draw me into your stories. I can’t wait to find out what’s next for RJ and Lauren (as well as an update on Sasha and Sienna and Cal n Annie). Thank you.

One of the best stories ive ever read on this site! Sensual & so sexy but not over the top!!!!

Huge fan of your stories but also wanted to thank you for writing such well-developed Asian characters that never feel exoticized or fetishized. Descriptions of physical appearance is a big part of these stories, understandably, and I really appreciate that in your stories a wide spectrum of women are considered attractive.

I love all of your stories, but this one was just so good! This is my second time reading it (within a very short time), and it was just as good, or even better, than the first time I read it. Thank you for sharing this with us.

Oh, and I keep checking to see if you've uploaded any new stories! :D

This was such an awesome story thank you!

That was Soo heartwarming and erotic at the same time.. thank you for coming up with such a great story and hope to see more excellent reads from you

My second time reading this and it's just as wonderful as the first time. I am one who loves the long building ups; the longing, the anitcipation, the romance. So beautiful.

I am such a sucker for good romance stories, and this is one of the very best! I fell in love with all the characters (save the doofus finance guy). This is my 4th go around with this one...won't be the last. I watched "The Orange Shirt" Sunday night on PBS. Kleenex city. I think this would be a great story to see visually. I love happy endings. Thank you, thank you, thank you.

6th time reading this. So hooked that I keep coming back. Thank you for this story.

This is my introduction to your writing. I’m captured. Beautifully written. It flows with the characters and they become real people. Sophisticated story teller. This wonderful story requires more than one reading.

Thank you.

Loved it from beginning to end.

A really well put together story, thoroughly enjoyed it from start to the excellent end! More of the same please

This was just flawless. I felt like this could be something I read about in a book, or see in a movie. MC falls in love with sexy, successful businessman/woman and they start to fall for each other. This story was just so sweet all the way through, I connected with the characters so easily, even though I am a straight guy. I could connect with how RJ was feeling when she was describing how her dates would be set-ups and she wouldn't feel any attraction, that's exactly how I felt. Communicating is one thing that my Aspergers isn't good with, I have a tendency to not communicate my feelings with significant others very well and my parents now that, so my mom always used to say and still sometimes says, "You'll know when she's the one because she'll love you for all of your flaws, including your shyness and lack of verbalizing how much you love someone, they'll always love you for your positive sides too."

Read this story after reading another of your submissions, excuse me for forgetting the name but you manage to keep the reader intrigued without too much sex. Wonderful im going to enjoy reading the rest of your submissions. Slow build up with an explosive end.

This is so the _hit!! It grabbed my attention from the word go til the very end. Never say never cause the Universe has a way of saying, "Oh yeah, we'll see about that" and bring you life experiences to test your gall. I'm so glad these two got to be each others. What a wonderful read. And thank you Carey for sharing your creatve work and energy with us yet again. All the best

This is by far my favorite story I've ever read on here! If you'd published this I would read this all the time!

After reading chapter 2, I just had to re-read this chapter again, and you know what? it's still a wonderful story!

I'm really hoping you write more, I'd love to read more of your work. Thank you for sharing this with us!

I really injoyed your story. I know what it’s like to have the wind taken out of your sails!

This is a very beautiful story. I really enjoyed every bit of it. I am gay but in a hostile country, wish I could be free to express myself.

I was so totally absorbed, I felt I was there not just reading.

Absolutely wonderful.

You took us into your life and have is the answer to your feelings . What a beautiful trip it was. Thanks for a lovely story..

I Loved this story, the long slow burn, the build up, the Payoff!

I'd say you're a lesbian Hemingway, but that would be akin to damning you with faint praise, how about a Lesbian Phillip K. Dick?

I'd babble on for hours, but I need to read Part two, NOW. Its only 2 o clock in the morning, here.

Your stories jump out from the screen and come to life. I can never put my phone down until I have slurped up every last word... Thank you CT

This was an amazing story...almost too good to be on here thank you

This was my first story by you and I loved it... you are great at story telling..

I officially love the author. Been reading through your stories and so far I loved it.

The build-up was perfect, and the release was exhilarating.

I was in Loren/Ellie's shoes the whole time. To have Rowan (LOVE the name, BTW!) reciprocating the flirting and building up the tension made me wish I were there.

TEN STARS.

Very sexy build up, I'd be keen to read the same story ageing written from RJs perspective! Great characters and solid writing

Previously Carey, five years and four days and now, THIS! The story and characters were so well developed. I have a mental picture even for the supporting characters like Ian and Mona. So vivid. Carey Thomas, you are my favorite uthor!

Fourth time I’ve read this this year. It makes me laugh, in the right places, and takes me by surprise every time as if it were the first. The days drag whilst we wait for your new writing. Although the bar has been set high with Could you be mine.

As a first time reader here, i can say, i love it hehe, and i will surely gonna come back hehe. Thanks. I wish like Lauren I can experience it too haha not just out of curiousity but to experience the real feeling of having a gay lover.

I clicked on 4 by mistake - meant to click on 5.

The way you gradually build the RJ-LE relationship is spellbinding, and the sexual blossoming of the romance is totally gorgeous!

This is the first story of yours that I have read. I am delighted to have discovered you, and I will definitely be reading more!

Omg my stomach was full of butterflies reading this! This is one of the best love stories I’ve ever read on here! Great job!

Your writing carries the reader along with the skill only a born writer can command. I am hardly the first, and will not be the last, to say not to worry about the slow build up; as in any romance, that can be the part that makes the heart ache most, which, in reading a love story, is the sort of thing many of us like. The "will-they, won't they" part was done to perfection, and despite being sure they would end up together, you managed to make me wonder. If I could give this 10 it would not be enough. Thank you for a superb story.

Love this story!!

It just happened to me again. Monday morning, two days ago. The manager making the hiring decision told the new senior group leader Friday evening over drinks, "You're hired. Can you start Monday morning?" Even HR didn't find out until the new guy was being introduced to everyone around the office. There he is, already "working" without even being covered by the corporate insurance plan.

As for me, I found out after 10 am when the New Employee form showed up in my e-mail. It takes 10 business days to get one of those sexy slimline executive laptops onto my desk. So why am I to blame when IT equipment isn't ready the day the new person starts?

This shite happens at least 10 times a year where I work. Most often with senior hires, which is typical and stupid.

Really enjoyed the slow buildup. There's even a lot of room for additional storyline as they develop their relationship. Well done!!

Theres a lot of good stuff going on here. Your prose itself is decent. It doesnt really falter anywhere. The concept of the story is great as well. A newbie carefully seducing an emotionally unavailable lesbian. I like the character dynamic.

My biggest issues were centered on some of your character decisions.

I dont really buy, personally, the whole "switch flip" reasoning behind Lauren's gay-ifying. Maybe you've had a different experience, but for me it was a longer series of internal arguments and was nothing as simple as a "switch". I feel like you've burned a lot of interesting character work by simplifying it so much

I also have a problem with how you've handled RJ. You say shes never had a good relationship, but then casually undermine it with "oh you've just had bad blind dates". And then simply falls in love with ellie anyway. RJ didnt didnt do anything or experience anything that shlukd have changed her mind. You could have played a lot with RJ learning to open up and be vulnerable. Ellie teaches DJ how to love. Rj teaches ellie about being gay.

Having said that. You did do some good work here, and I did enjoy it. I havent read the second chapter yet but I will. Good work :)

I really liked this story a lot. I could totally see this being a regular movie.

I giggled several times and then when the finally got together I was just like aww..

All in all a nice read and I liked the slow build

Wow. Just wow. Amazing Story!!!

That's all I can say Damn Girl!!!!!

That is hands down the best story I've read here. The humor, the interplay between L.E. and Ian, and the glorious happy ending. Bravo! It made me cry.

That’s was breathtaking.. it made me teary .. what a great love story .. thanks !!

I love your writing style, the multiple layers of interplay between the characters, and the added touches of humor. Thank you very much. One of the very best I've read. You are a truly amazing writer.

Because you write a great story, believable, correctly done, one that is a great mix of sex, relationships, and life in general. I'm happy that this story has a part 2, even when it didn't need one. The story ended as if it was planned to have only one chapter. Thank you.

I truly loved every word. From the beginning, i imagined myself to be 'Ellie'..I couldn't wait to have sex with RJ, who I fell in love with. Thank you so much.

Love, Lisa Palmer

Just wow!!

Love the way it was written and interplay between the characters!

Definitely on my list of favourite stories!

that was smoking....wow!

What an amazing story

This was just purely amazing

This story was so everything, I couldn't put it down. I had to read it to the end and I'm so glad I did. LOVED IT.

WHEW...SO hot!

Didn't recall reading this before, but did and glad I gave it 5 then, totally worth it.

hadn't realized there was a Ch 2-so looking forward to it, and promised more stories about them

“All things come to those who wait”. I love your style. Keep us waiting and .....

I DID SO NOT WANT IT TO END. I THANK YOU FOR THIS LOVE STORY.

Love it, love it, love it!!