All Comments on 'Cousin'

Writing two stories that are almost identical except for changing one character is a waste of time on your part. I knew seeing two stories posted by you on the same day with the same opening paragraph would result in not having to bother reading one of them or even both.

I hate stories written in the third person, spoiled it completely. That and not knowing that only about 5% of a cumshot is from the balls.

Some of this was very good, other parts not so much. I immediately get bored to death with every Protagonist having a John Holmes sized cock and being the star of the football team. 😒 That bullshit gets really old really fast. I would have liked it better if Curtis had been an ordinary average man like the rest of us. I started to give you a score of one based on that alone.

But as I continued to struggle through your boring story, I saw a glimmer of real genius too. If you could pull out the bullshit clichés and get serious, you'll have some excellent stories to share. I gave you a 3/5.

I'm not gay, and I'm not female, so the second person perspective, as always, was a horrible choice, but not your worst choice with this one.

The worst choice you made was to submit it for publication.

Enjoyed the read, too short though. 3/5