by Lovecraft_Lore
For sure as a woman, I wouldn't really be able to climax with him as a lover.
Details! Several times like “Fred and her went into town.” When the SUBJECTS (Fred, her) are arranged that way the way to decide about the pronoun (her) is to Forget The Noun and just say the sentence with the pronoun. “Her went ito town.”. If that sounds OK, there is a lot moreto learn. If it sounds wrong, try saying it with the alternate pronoun …”She went into town.” (which is correct.). The same happens if the OBJECTS are a noun plus a pronoun. “When I was in Mary’s house, I taught she and Jane to make churros.” In short, it should be “… I taught HER and Jane…”.
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The story premise is excellent. You could use some coaching on how to make the sex more graphic, however. I think it would enhance the story.