by MVP6
Clever
Absurd premise but delightful banter and excruciating descriptions. Earthy, sensual, splendid.
I'm not sure what to say. The writing is quite skillful and I love the spin you put on the acts of oral sex, especially turning the olfactory experience on its head. Technically, it's a great POV story with a difference. And that difference is where I struggle a bit with the story.
The main characters seem to be high functioning autistic. I'm not sure if that was your intent or just to portray uber-nerds, but it did give me pause (then again, I was one of those who wondered about Sheldon on Big Bang Theory). If I thought you were making fun of them, I would be upset. However, while reading it, I realized the joke was on Jenni, as Keno gave her incredible sexual satisfaction. I was reminded of the memorable nerd/cheerleader post-coital scene in Revenge of the Nerds.
Not your run of the mill story, but that's what makes it 5 star for me.
Except for the foot part, this was how my sister and her pals greeted me after school every day. Lick this one through her underpanties, tongue this one on her butthole, sniff this other one's farts, finger this one and then sniff that finger while I'm doing my homework, and so on. Thank you I enjoyed this story.