All Comments on 'Dad's Third Wife'

by histmajor

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AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Unfinished

Why did you not complete the story, or are you thinking about a follow up?

bigdnc13bigdnc13over 9 years ago
Good story, but...

I enjoyed the story. It had a very erotic build-up to the sex, but the ending(?) was a little ragged. When did get the divorce letter? Was it before the date, or the next morning after she left Ryan in bed? Speaking of endings how about one for this story. Is there a future for these two. The interaction between the two was very well done.

Along the same lines, an ending for 'I'm an Old Fashioned Secretary' would be nice. It's a hot story with all kinds of possibilities for a number of additional chapters.

ResidentWeavilResidentWeavilover 9 years ago
Have to agree

This was going along fine and then, in the last couple of paragraphs, it just flopped over dead.

I thinkit would help if there had been something that made it clearer that the letter came before the party. But if that is the case, why was she still trying to set up the next project for the company when she was likely to be out by the time it matured?

Still, a grrod read up till then. Thanks!

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