All Comments on 'Damn Ch. 02'

You have wonderful turns of phrases that made me smile whilst reading this chapter. Alec's 'explosive journeys' show the value of the brain as a sex organ in any erotic exploration! You moved the story on nicely using the spark of jealousy to show that he was unexpectedly drawn to Kayla in a way which surprised even Alec himself. It feels like there is depth in the background and histories of the three main characters introduced so far. I love the camaradarie and friendsip between Dylan and Kayla. The shallowness and snobbery of the mother was a good way of showing that Alec is a person who likes to see people as people and doesn't like the 'we're better than poor people' game. The interaction with his mother also helps unpack some to the frustrations he's been expressing in the 82 and counting sighs during this and the previous chapter. Can't wait for your next chapter

Too bad! I kinda like Dylan...but i like Alec as well. I'd like to see them both fighting over Kayla...two gorgeous men! lol

Loved it! and thank you for manking it longer too!! Can't wait for the next part

I wish you hadn't mentioned that bit at the end about Dylan and Whatserface not hooking up ever. The greatest parts about stories is the anticipation and not really knowing where it's headed. That comment was like reading the last chapter of a book first and spoiling the surprises. Please don't do that anymore.

but why tell us that D and K will never be together? quite frankly, that's a bit of a turn off,and actually kind of boxes in your story.I hope you'll reconsider...

My mom favorite thing to find on Literotica is a good story with chapters already written, so I get four chapters without waiting. It's a good story. Loving Alec and Dylan.

lord this story is great I love all the characters and I can't wait to read more.

Great story. I already absolutely HATE Victoria. I Cant wait to find out how Alec discovers Kayla & Dylan are NOT an item ;). keep up the work this is great with definite potential. <3

Like a hot knife through butter.

I am rushing to the next chapter.

Okay, the bit about her taking a call during her interview was jarring - especially after showing up late! Even after being offered the job, in real life that offer would be politely rescinded because of bad manners. Well, except in the instance where your future boss hired you because he had the hots for you - and didn't care that you were having a completely unprofessional conversation with a third party on a cellphone. Otherwise, good story.

...great writing! You even use the classic "station" in life which is a time-honored device in all kinds of literature to try to show class differences. I'm even more impressed by how you draw out Alec's, Dylan's and Kayla's feelings, thoughts and emotions. Alec's interaction with his haughty mother was so real, as was his irritation. The low blow (that any reader should feel) was for how his mother spoke to Dylan.

Great writing. An easy 5!! :)