All Comments on 'Dave Gets an Education'

I wish my college years were this exciting! Great story, can't wait to see where this one goes. So much potential! Thanks for the great story!!

Good set up, can't wait to read the est of it!

Cheers and all the best.

The size of the house is fearsome and it does seem like an awful lot of work will be coming his way. I think that I mean TOO much work, considering that he will have his student commitment and the business of serving all those women..and the maintenance task around the house.

He has already described becoming sweaty on the 4 mile bike ride, and he will be doing that twice a day as well.

This would be a dream assignment IF: the weather were not so oppressive. IF: the workload were not so oppressive. IF: he did not have a full time College Course to get through...and the study that would require on arrival at the house. AND: he would never know when he will be summoned to give service to the women. No wonder that her husband is dead. This workload is ridiculous. He wants to live out his promise but he is a young man and it is just going to be too much for him. As well as all that, he will be so busy with his task that he will not have time to appreciate all that is good in this offer

As with The Parson’s Famous Egg. Good in parts.

Great story but don't change the way you tell it or you'll spoil it.

'Edna was sitting at the dining room table with Dave on his knees licking and sucking'

You went from first tense to third tense. Be consistant and learn when to use your and you're.

Grammar cost you a star. There were too many errors to list. My English teacher in prep school would lower our letter grades one step for each error, so you would get an F. However, much of your writing is good and so is the story concept. If you want to be a serious writer you need to consult the Chicago Manual of Style and learn correct grammar. I like the story, please continue.

Average for Female Dominance/Male Submission story. I will add this, punishment can become torture if not restrained. Believe me I know; both as a Dom & a Sub.