All Comments on 'Deal with the Devil'

If this was written as a short story it has real potential. As it is, it fails to deliver as it's awkward to read.

Thanks for the feedback.

For me, I think this is one of the most interesting scripts that I've written, and I'd get a kick watching this. But sorry that the format turns you off.

I like the aspect of this short type of vignette. The great thing about something written like this is that it can end here or you could create an entire long form multi-chapter story showing both the backstory of Mercedes and the life she has now and how she handles this and the future. You are very good with inner monologue which is one of the things I really enjoy when someone is setting up the story since you don’t require much longer form conversation since it pretty much allows the reader to decipher exactly what is happening and why. I look forward to reading more of your future creations to see what directions you take.

Stay safe and be well.

J.D.

Thank you for the feedback.

I've enjoyed the challenge of writing this type of story --trying to write something that would fit into a 15-20 minute video and is very plot-focused and something I'd like to watch.

I'm also getting lots of comments encouraging me to write some traditional short stories again. Maybe. But not yet.