All Comments on 'Death and Cheating'

Is it a surprise that cheating leads to bad things?

The reader has to decide if there is culpability and if there is, were it lies.

sort of trash

WTF a seal would never have left Dr Ray alive!!

Story wasn't half bad, but you real needing an editor. The other stupid part was about him being a "navy SEALS". This guy was to much of a clueless cuckold, to have ever of been a Seal. As far as wanting to kill her, anyone would feel like that after what she said, and had done to him with the cheating. But love the pushing the door "accident", not that she didn't Deserve it..

She got what she deserved, she didnt just cheat she humiliated him and paid for it with her life.

Alas a retributipn

Any doubt why the wife planned to leave the husband?

The easiest way to deal with a complicated story is simply kill one of the characters.

Does the American army have a special cuck training program? I don't think there could be a single soldier that hasn't been cucked going from all these stories.

We’ll written - sure a lot of grammar issues but it’s not easy writing a story and getting it posted. Shouldn’t dump on the author - write one better instead

Accident happened. First the good Dr. admitted that he was facing a nurse that worked for him. SEXUAL HARRASMENT, charges filed by her estate, against the good Dr. and the hospital, good for a half million a piece after the attorney 1/3. Then if you still want to screw with the Dr. go after his license to practice medicine, just getting him suspended for a short period of time and his insurance rates will be out of site. He will be working for the Department of Correction in some prison somewhere for peanuts for the rest of his life. I just ignored the Seal part it made for a better story. The kitchen and the bath are the most dangerous rooms in the home.

I agree the husband was written way too wimpy. But in the end the piece of garbage died, and the story hints that the second piece of garbage will, and results are all that matter, so what could have been a disgusting wimpfest of 1 stars, is upgraded to a 4 star BTB.

Some of the typos and misused/incorrect words in this story are actually pretty funny! His "SEALS" training is the best. This writer is the poster child for quantity over quality.

Great story. But he was still Blissfully Ignorant Wimp cuckold. Why couldn't he at least taken some kind of revenge on good old Ray? The author could have just added a couple more Paragraphs to take care of the doc !!

Verbal garbage. Nothing here done remotely well.

Navy Seal my ass! No Navy Seal would be a pathetic excuse of a man that this fucktard is. The story could only have been written by an imbecile. 1/5

This guy had so much stupid in him it stopped being entertaining about three paragraphs in.

I don't know who suggested you post this, but ignore them next time and don't. This was awful, unrealistic and stupid. After the first page the story just goes to crap. Hopefully someone takes this and makes a better version.

PUTRID! An ugly piece of shit with a pathetic wimp of a husband. 1 star. I would give it a 0 if I could.

overkill on all the evidence until she got home. a Navy Seal that cries and vomits when she tells him? Not. I would have ripped the slut dress off her before dinner telling her to wear something decent.

What a pathetic figure of a man! A sissy. A wimp. Does not deserve any woman.

Don't know how I finished it. A load of rubbish

"It was like all the training as a Navy SEALS came back to me..." said NO Navy SEAL, ever. SEAL is an acronym, no 'S' on the end, and the plural is SEALs. Otherwise, this is one of the most realistic confrontational pieces I've ever read on this site. Well-written except for the ill-conceived 'I'm a Navy SEAL Card'. 5/5!!!

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Need an answer to that Parthian shot of a question at the end!!! Please.

Gave it a 5 just because of the dead wife

1 star for a pathetic story.

1 for this story says it all

From a wimp to an ex seal.........give me a fucking break. No trained seal would be so stupid about what was going on. An the first clue would have been enough to investigate and end it.

Good riddance to the whore and the hospital would need another doctor very soon. Third world countries don’t really care about accidents. Bag it, tag it and move on. Tourist business can’t be Impeded. No accident at the house. Cunt and lover boy would have gone on the cruise and never come home.... good riddance

He should have put his hands around her whoring neck and squeezed. That doctor would get his, not knowing the day or the time

When a woman starts the disrespect of her husband it's time to move on know matter how much you have loved her sometime you have to be a hard man to deal with women's attitudes

The stupid cunt got what she deserved

suck a dick you cuck

of the commenters that put down the authors and their stories just because you don't like the type of story it is, go write your own stories the way you like them. Or would that be too hard for you. It doesn't seem that it is too hard, the way you go on and on about how the story should be. (in your mind not the authors)

I believe that a story is just that, a story. Something that can have anything that the story teller can imagine. And still be ok.

And I am guessing that none of you have ever made a mistake.

Still a good story to me. 5 *****

What a friggin stupid ending to an otherwise okay story. -1*

You just wait 6 months to a year and the good doctor gets mugged and killed. Just make sure to gave a good alibi.

Shirley albeit was downright cruel to her husband Bud when he confronted her,but in all honesty did Shirley deserve to die because of it,no. I'll explain Dr. Ray was your typical Studly Doctor that had a huge ego,that he used to get Shirley to sleep with him,thereby getting the excitement of knowing he stole another mans wife which is like ambrosia to a single horny stud like Ray.

And Shirley got the thrill out of turning her husband Bud into a cuckold,but that's the problem,for Shirley she was basically seduced by Dr. Ray and was blinded by the fact that Dr. Ray was just using Shirley,but reputation doesn't lie when it comes to assholes like Dr. Ray,sure he may have stayed with Shirley for a little while until the newness wore off but then he'd get tired of Shirley and move on to someone else cause she would be like yesterdays trash,forgotten.

So Shirley didn't realize Dr. Ray totally brainwashed her and Shirley had no clue what she was saying when she called Bud a needle dicked wimp,because Dr. Ray had her convenced he loved Shirley but in truth it was all just an act to get Shirley to give her pussy to him whenever he wanted.

Now it was sad Shirley had to die,but hopefully in death she looked back and realized what Dr. Ray did to her and she regrets what she said to her husband Bud,and maybe in her next life she can make amends for what happened in this past life.I don't think people are inheirently evil but I think along the lines some people just snap and can't control it like Bud as I don't think he really wanted to kill his wife I just think he got so angry that he had no clue what he was doing pure and simple.

Lastly even if all is said and done,no matter how screwed up Shirley and Buds lives were atleast they created two decent kids together,that has to count for something.

...in the Loving Wives stories. This woman was just a cruel, mean spirited, horrible individual who dug her own grave with her words. The issue I had with this story was the ending. Her lover needed to share some the pain. An entire follow up story (1 page would be enough)could focus on the husband's revenge on her lover.

I don't think this writer is! The spelling and the grammar are absolutely atrocious! The story is pathetic and are there 2 kids or 1 or any? I don't like to be this negative but....there was nothing to be positive about in this story.

Euh... YES YOU ARE.

This sadass couldn't have been a bigger wimp if his whole life depended on it.

Clueless to see what was so obviously happening right in front of him, 'cause HE LOVES HIS WIFE SOOOOOOO MUCH; unable to recognize cum when he see it, EXACTLY where he should expected to find it, 'cause NO WAY WOULD MY WIFE CHEAT ON ME!!!; unable to control his emotion over her sordid confession, even though nothing she told him wasn't expected, but IT HURT SOOOOO MUCH, WOUAIIIIN!!!! And, even though she's literally spitting at his face, laughing at him for being so much of a loser, he couldn't figure out how much she loathe him... STILL WAITING TO TRY TO SAVE THE MARRIAGE!!!

Really, I've seen characters with way more balls in Matt Moreau stories. That's saying something!

Seriously, the author did Bud a solid by essentially 'Final Destination'ing Shirley's skanky ass out of his and, way more importantly, their children's life. Sorry, but this man was a cuckold thorough, a poor excuse of a man so completely hung up on a woman who seemed to have despised him for most their marriage, he had no idea of the depth of her unfaithfulness. Seriously, in a marriage, it kinda worthless to be extremely happy, as Bud seemed to be, if you don't have a clue how unhappy your partner is. Shirley said she has been cheating on her husband with some big cocks since barely after giving birth to her first child (pretty much shutting down, by the way, her other claim that he wasn't the father of their kids, but we'll talk about NeedYou's lazy writing later...), and kept repeating ad nauseum how much Stevens was superior to him in every way... You know what an actual man do after hearing such things? Grab the slut and immediately throw her naked ass out of the door. At a minimum.

What did Bud said instead?

"So there's no chance we can work this out. I love you Shirley and I have since the day I saw you the first time. I'd be willing to work hard to make things right with us if you will."

Wimp.

No - actually: ultra wimp.

Gotta said, though, the author did himself absolutely no favor by making such a pathetic main character a Navy Seal - right there, just by doing this, just by introducing such an unrealistic factor about who Bud is, his story lost a star, in my book. There's a lot of things NeedYou add to his sad little tale that ultimately doesn't jell well as a whole: the aforementioned questioning of Bud's paternity, when Shirley admitted to not have cheat on him before having their first kid; the constant need for him to continuously get more proofs of her infidelity, when what he already got was more than enough; the introductions of threads that went nowhere (Bud's friends Larry) or that were never explained (the key in her car / 'Rt.22 and US 1'); and this fuckingly dumb open-ending, where Bud wonder if he should get his pound of flesh out of Stevens, when he clearly SHOULD... But, then again, wouldn't it be how a wimp would actually act like?

Basically, I should like this story more... problem is, I have very little sympathy for his main character. Don't get me wrong - ain't crying no tear over Shirl's death, may she rot in hell for eternity, but when you walk away, thinking that a guy not being able to feel anymore, given the scope of the betrayal he suffered, when you end up thinking this is the BEST THING TO EVER HAPPEN TO HIM, 'cause it would finally force this sissy to drop his ball, his kids notwithstanding...

Kinda hard feeling any good thing from such a story.

Huge mistake on character building. No way a seal is that unaware of what is going on. And no way an alpha male which is a requirement almost to be a seal. Comes from the pathetic excuse for a man you built in the lead character.

Very poor work and not believable. Proof reading is a lost art in the now generation.

REALLY????!!!!!! First he's a wimp and suddenly he's an ex seal???? Get real!!!!

He's a pussy! In reality he fucks up the "good doctor" so bad he spends the rest of his life in a wheel chair and can NEVER use his cock again!

Just utterly stupid.....

You must really hate men to make such stupid path idiotic sniveling whimp.

pathetic cuck shit.

If not for his wife then for the next wife or ten wives. He is a predator and gets joy from breaking up families. Think of the other children while burying him alive in the mountains. Make sure he suffers with plenty of time to know it is his own damn fault.

wimpiest SEAL ever.

No one is that stupid especially a SEAL

You insult the all of the armed services not just the Navy.

He didn't know if he had enough proof yet when he had the stained underwear in addition to all of the other things? That's just ridiculous.

You need to learn the difference among to, too and two. You need to learn the past tense of the verb to see. It is not conjugated I seen, You seen; He, She, It seen. You should get an editor to help you with your grammar. I got half way through the first page; then I had to quit reading because it was a chore trying to overlook your massacre of the English language.

i was with you all the way until you mentioned "navy seal".

a great devastating betrayal but a weak ending. enjoyed it though and 5* for a great confrontation.

part 2 about revenge n the asshole she cheated with :)

Of course he needs to feel the pain. He destroyed this family by targeting a married wife and mother. It should not be done fast like the wife. It should be slow and determined.

This story reads like it was written by a fourth grader.

~ Nobody can be as blind or stupid as that dim-wit husband! No fuckin' way anybody that stupid could have been a Navy Seal!

~ As far as the piece of shit whore of a wife is concerned,I only wish she would have died a much slower and more painful death! Her life was all about her cunt! The hell with her husband.To hell with her children. All she cared about was her big-dicked dick of a doctor.

~ Best ending would be for Dr. Big Dick and the stupid former SEAL to have a head-on car accident in which both bought the farm! (The children could be adopted by one of the sets of grand parents. Lord knows,they'll be much better off then if their shit parents had survived!

I know,it's only a story,fiction, so I shouldn't get so worked up!

Fine.Don't submit garbage like this to insult the intelligence of anyone with an IQ over 40!!!

cause now he has to look over his shoulder to kept that oath out of his ass, TK U MLJ LV NV

who wrote this. Good story 5 for effort and content

He was a bitch... Wtf was he crying for??? She absolutely hated him... He sitting up there crying like a little bitch over a cum slut...I thought men in militaries had balls and strategize... Was his strategy to cry? It had potential but I didn't believe for a minute he was in the seals..it was just too weak

The US military has only about 3% of its personnel in "Special Forces" (SEAL, Delta Force, Army Ranger or Army Special Forces, Black Ops) and increased the total number from 42.8 thousand in 2001 to 62.8 thousand in Fiscal Year 2014. 91% are military, another 9 thousand are civilian (source: GAO Report: Special Operations Forces, July 2015, available at: http://www.gao.gov/assets/680/671462.pdf)

But to read Literotica, every single one of them is now out of the service and has a cheating wife or girlfriend, or is a friend of a guy with a cheating wife or girlfriend!

This "Deus ex Machina" plot device has been around for about 2500 years, originating in Greek tragedy plays and has been roundly criticized ever since it first appeared. Please stop this foolishness, authors!

In this story especially, the Special Forces past of the protagonist adds nothing to the story flow, and as others have commented, makes him to appear more of a wimp; i.e., if he was such a Macho Man, why did he take it from the wife's lover, and put up with the wife's actions? The story would have been better if this concept of the protagonist being such a trained professional had not appeared.

Without the SF issue, 4 stars. (Minus 1 star for no resolution with the wife's lover, whether financial, physical, professional, etc. Have the protagonist do something to the doc! Sue him, expose him to the State Medical Board and try to get his license to practice pulled, make such a public furor over his cheating at his place of employment that the hospital fires him, go Postal on him, or something!)

The Special Forces matter cost another star.

The story was overall well written, flowed nicely, with good grammar, spelling and punctuation and kept the reader's interest.

Please keep on writing. (Perhaps a follow up on the doctor's just deserts.)

If as many guys were in the SEAL's as authors make out in these stories, the navy wouldn't have anybody left to drive a boat.

Sad story of a twat who valued sex above children,family,and loving husband. To HELL with her! KARMA can be a bitch!

he has to be the lamest SEAL ever.

bad story. bad ending. author can't write in english. try another.

the emotion was there, and the feeling I got was that hubby was really dense, in his thinking. the sorry part of the whole thing was that the wife never got the punishment she deserved, and good old ray skated away free, to ruin someone else's marriage.that just isn't right in my book.

I have never seen so many errors in grammar, spelling and punctuation in a published story.

Loved it. The lust, the hate. I truly felt the emotion. Wonderfully written 5/5

I gave it a 4 only because shes dead. I hoped he would do somethi g. Just give him time. Story not badly written. But way over the top in hate. Again shes dead.

The only revenge he needs on Dr. Ray is to sue him and sue the hospital for interfering with his marriage. The stupid Dr. already admitted as much in open Court. You should get millions from the Dr and the hospital. And the Dr gets fired. What more do you need? Bad ending.

badly written pile of shit.

btb

thanks for the effort.

I wouldn't have killed her because I would have already packed up and left. Several have commented on the SEAL thing. I was in the army. You don't have to be a SEAL to know what to do. Moreover, I doubt if a SEAL would have lost control; he would have left without one backward glance. About the doctor; I would not have gone after him. I would have wanted my ex-wife to marry the SOB. I'd be free from alimony, and I bet I'd see them break up after a year or so. I imagine I'd get the kids after a short while. My guess is she wouldn't want to be bothered. If I got my kids I could go on without her. Maybe I'd try for alienation of affection, or find out if the hospital where they worked had any morals standards. That could be fun. That would have been something. I remember what my daddy said, "Stand them on their heads and they're all sisters." I'd be sad for a while, but I'd move on. The notion there's only woman in all the world is pure shit.

I gave the story a five, but there were quite a few mechanical problems. It was a free read; what the heck. Thanks, it was fun.

he is only going to make one more after Disney TK U MLJ LV NV

if they return they are truly yours....if not...HUNT THEM DOWN and KILL IT!

And I know that I am more man than this wimp bastard. He only killed his slut wife by accident, I think, and he put up with too much, too long, to have been classified a man. I doubt if many Seals would do that. And to let Dr. Ray off, hell no. Since I am complaining, the author writes as though he barely got through the 5th or 6th grade. I usually just let that stuff slide. I know that it is just a story BUT...

I'll pile on too. The story has numerous spelling and grammatical errors. The Navy Seal add-on was silly. We knew more about her clothes than we did about either primary character.

Although I liked the story, my vote is only a 2/5 because the technical quality of your writing feels like it was from a fifth grader. If you can't find and fix those dozens and dozens of errors by yourself, then PLEASE look for a beta reader. With every word you're publishing unedited you insult your readers.

That sob need a major beating so he would never practice again. He wife was a slut. To bad for him at least he can start over again and has his children.

Could have used some editing for some of the annoying grammar mistakes, but over all, not a bad read. Next time, forget the Navy Seal crap. That added nothing to the story and just seemed silly.

...that so many cheated husbands turn out to be former SEALs in these stories? Just wondering.

Seriously, you need an editor, bud. You know, someone to catch your spelling mistakes and tell you that the green things they wear in hospitals are called scrubs... simple stuff.

Then you need to develop characters that have more than one dimension. Could the woman have been more of a cut-out? And the husband?...yikes! I think if he had photos of her screwing other men you'd still have him pondering if she was actually cheating on him. "Hmm, I have hotel receipts, cum stained clothes and now these photos. Could she be cheating on me?"

a good persons death is mourned and yet their memory lives on with love, a selfish persons memory is erased, all the friends they had forget them quick for all the truth about them comes out in their memory,good endures in love.evil is erased and degrades,think about people you've lost good vs evil one is always there and the other is thrown away or just ignored..we all do it..and cheaters are never good parents..they are evil.

She died too soon. Ne was a little wimpy begging her to stay and work things out but she was a cheating skank whore wife. She should have lived and broke her neck. That would have been fun.

HA

Many humans are total assholes. We have a whoring wife that has more brains in her little toe than the asshole she is married to. He had all he needed to follow-up, get a PI plus a lawyer and shaft the bitch... but NO WAY... he's a total asshole (they live amongst us and they reproduce... UGH!).

The sentence that killed the story completely:

"So there's no chance we can work this out. I love you Shirley and I have since the day I saw you the first time. I'd be willing to work hard to make things right with us if you will."

I agree with the overuse of navy Seals in these stories. If the Navy had as many men ten the Seals as litrotica authors suppose, there would be nobody to drive the boats.

navy seals aren't pussies. nor are they prone to indecision. make your cucks authors of internet erotica.

I know you are not the only one, but please cut back back on using Navy SEAL's as wimps. I was on a Admiral Staff once during my time in the Navy and have met a few real SEAL's. The one's I met are not wimps, they would of beat the shit out of their wife if they talked like Shirley. I'm not saying they all are wife beaters but you don't get to be a SEAL by being a wimp. Shirley was extremely vicious and cruel and no man would being crying and begging for that bitch to stay. As for Dr Ray, he would be in a world of hurt soon. Like i said before SEAL's are not wimps. I've seen a SEAL take down a man for hitting on his wife or girl let alone them to screw her. For all writers out there don't put down the military's finest to make your story. I wasn't a SEAL and I got training in fire arms and first aid, use a normal soldier if you want to wimp him out. There are all types in the Services but to be one of the best there is a hard weeding out to get the best. A man like Mitch Buchannon on the show Bay Watch would never been a SEAL. He proclaimed himself as pacifist that would not kill, being a SEAL means your are the last option. That means all the talking is over and the enemy must be taken down (killed). They don't win the hearts and minds, they don't negotiate, they go in and take care of the problem and then leave period!

you learn something that most grammar school kids know about the English language.

his revenge was ok because the bitch died but the begging sucked.

Some people just ask for what they get, and she definately asked big time. So let the bleading hearts say what they want, it won't stop the eneviable from happening.

Unfortunatelly I do not like the violance cheating wife husband revenge stories. The good stories deal with the divorce proceeding,a newer mate for the exhusband (in a super story is a heppier new marriage) and the DNA test results, which it is evidance he is the biological father of his children.

However, spelling is not good, and hubby was humiliated without proper retribution to Dr. Asshole, much to my dismay.

The poor grammar spoils the story. Having the male be a doofus is just plain insulting to the reader. It spoils the story because everything is simplified too much to be enjoyable.

spell. Learn grammar. Learn how to construct a sentence. Then read good fiction for about 10 years. Then, try to develop a mature imagination. In the mean time do not, repeat not, give up your day job.

How can the author enjoy writing about such a dull, stupid, insensitive, jerk unless he's trying to expunge something similar from his insides? He writes that the hubby worships and adores his wife. This hubby doesn't have the mental capacity to worship or adore anything. The continued dumbness of hubby was an increasing irritant up the the lazy ending of hubby all of a sudden performing an action. I doubt that a guy this dumb would ever have been a Seal. How can the author be as illiterate as the man, either? However, editing probably could not save this piece of dribble.

oh? i loved the ending.

However the slut wife was mentally ill. The good doctor needs to have an accident one night and lose his balls. It would be easy enough to get him by himself and wear clothing your cant be IDed in to take care of him. Actually eliminating the wife from the gene pool was a very good move and helped humanity. Yep, hubby is a wimp, but at least he is a wimp with some character and ethics.

It's very tired to create a character like the husband who is so meek and defensive in the marriage, then full of vigor in getting retribution against wife. The death was a cheap way out to end the story, and he would go after the dear doctor who caused him pain. The wife character was built to maximize negative responses because she had no humanity, only lack of self esteem and self confidence. This all must be a public exposition of the author's self doubts. And pretty well expressed through the story. Bunch of tripe. And English must be a second language, given the nearly illiterate examples scattered throughout the story. Get an editor.

Well written but depressing story. Also nothing erotic about husband and wife screaming at each other and husband killing wife.

The Ct. Yankee

but at least he got "closure" with slut wife.Making him a seal was a joke, although the two ex-"SEALs" I've known weren't particularly tough.(At least mentally)Most of the training shit they do we did in 8th grade through Outward Bound.I knew what drownproofing was (yes-hogtied too) before the U.S. military ever adopted it.So writers maybe if you want to fantasize about what a real man is go for force recon.Them I fear!Pistolpackinpete

How about the lack of respect that he showed you. How about his trying to get you put in prison. NO you are just a product of Need U 's mind and he is a dumb ass. He wouldn't get angry if I raped his little daughter, sold his grandmother to a whorehouse. He is too much of a wussy wimp and he should hang himself. Thats the only he will ever be hung...what with his little one inch pee pee.No I'm not the wimp husband type You are the wimp period. Go fuck off creep needyou

No need to kill her at the end of the story. The husband's prediction of the future would have been much more fun to read about.

I have Two friends who are ex navy seals,If I were married to either of them I would not want to be caught cheating on either of them,they both love there wives dearly but don,t think for a second they would put up with cheating, and as for the boy friend ,It would be a really great Idea to go far far away,They have this thing about protecting what is theres,and also there pride as men,they may have tears in there eyes but it would be while doing great bodily harm to who ever had caused there pain.

all you do is sit and jerk off that little 3 inch cock and bitch at the writers on here that try to entertain people. SEALS are people too thy would fuck you up in a heart beat but still love and feel. So just keep your sad queer comments to yourslf because you don't know a fucking thing about SEALS.