All Comments on 'Debtor's Kiss'

A short, enjoyable tale. A full, brutal story told in a few words. 5 stars

Evocative reveal of emotions flowing unseen beneath the visible surface of life. This is really well done.

Thank you both x

Maybe I read too fast or I'm too tired, but I don't get it. What does that ending mean?

This is so sad and leaves me hanging. Wanting more. Beautifully done. There needs to be another category for smaller works, they have a powerful voice!

Poetic and raw. 5 stars!

Thanks for the feedback Elora, and anon.

A short precis to clarify for anon: Enzo loved Elizabeth once, and she fancied him too but thought he was a bit of a bastard, so fobbed him off until he left and joined the army. When he came back she'd fallen into the world's oldest profession and he was married. He was torturing himself for a few months and punishing her by buying her semi willing arse for more than it was worth because he knew she probably needed the money. Then he realised she still thought he was dodgy as fuck, so he gave her one last tryst to remember him by and fucked off forever without paying. She was quite into it apart from being worried all the racket would wake her kids, but he blew his load before she came leaving her bosom heaving and her well... You know the rest XXX

I might carry it on, I'll see if Elizabeth speaks to me tonight.

XXX

I keep returning to this story despite, or maybe because of, its bleakness. It is short and yet there is so much in it: so much passion and hunger. You write wonderfully. Thankyou.