All Comments on 'Denton's Desire'

Same old, same old. Blah, blah, blah. Nothing new or exciting here, move along folks. Please tell me how a drunken cop fucking a well used slut equals romance. Better luck next time. 2*

Congratulations on your first story. You asked for feedback so here’s a little. You did a nice job with with the mechanics (just a couple of typos I caught in a casual read) but there weren’t any real surprises (either the brick, his willingness, or her intent). Most of all, it’s in the wrong category (probably should be Erotic Couplings instead of Romance), leaving this who look for quasi-realistic relationships feeling lacking and those looking for a an EC hookup missing out.

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That said, it’s a nice effort that you can build on and improve, either with another story or possibly a continuation of this one. Keep working on it, keep writing, and you’ll keep improving and gaining readers. Best wishes!

The good : the story is told in detailed scenes, filled with images. The bad : this is not a romance, Erotic Couplings would be a better fit.

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You can write, but this is not the category for this story.

Enjoyed this story, great first attempt. I’d like to find out more about these characters

Thankyou for the feedback!

Apologies that I chose the wrong category. I was not conviced I chose the correct one when I submitted but could not work out a better choice. Will try better next time.