All Comments on 'Didn't Want to be a Hero'

Couldn't make it through the confusing sentence structure, starting right out the gate. Gave up, sorry.

Thank you for commenting Angst, personally I'm obsessed with dangling participles...

This story was all over the place for me, both good and bad, and I suspect that it was all by design. Would this be considered "stream of consciousness "? The story did have it's moments though. The bisexuality was a bit off putting for me, and then in the next sentence say he wasn't gay... wtf? The story felt like it was on heavy drugs at times, lucid at other times, almost with a dream like quality . I gave it four stars, there was a ton of effort there

Thank you CrazyDave!

I thought I was having a metal seizure trying to follow the story! There is a reason why adverbs and adjectives exist, filling out sentences and paragraphs. Helping create actual storylines.

This read like a point listing of things. No real explanations, just 1, 2, 3, 4, etc.

No real explanation as to why all and sundry want to suck and fuck him, from day one. Nor any explanations why he also wants gay guys doing things to him and him wanting to fuck gays when he claims he isn't bi. I assure you, having a big cock does not suddenly cause every person he encounters to want to suck and fuck him. Particularly when he also seems to be mentally retarded, going by his actions and speech.

Your writing style made this a difficult read. Lack of proper sentence structure makes even a good plot a poor story.

Story ??? Makes me want to like the bad guy. At least he kept it in his pants.

Not my cup of tea. There might be a kernel of a good story in there, but it’s way overdone to the point that it’s ridiculous. The writing is so bad that it’s very hard to read. Nope.