All Comments on 'Dillon Hunt: Before the Fall Ch. 02'

I like where this is going and can't wait to read more on what is going to happen to poor Dilly.

Really enjoyed reading this, love your style of writing... Looking forward to the next episode and seeing how this story plays out :))

Did I miss something? Is he there on his own? I thought being in the trunk of a car meant he was abducted, but the last few paragraphs show he has a safe word and can leave. Hmm.

Thanks for the great feedback, everyone.

Good note, Anon. I'll be sure to clarify the situation in the final draft of chapter one.

Too much time describing clothing and not enough time describing actions or situations. The context of this "school" is murky and doesn't make sense. Might want to incubate this story a bit more