All Comments on 'Dina'

Enjoyed it but, the writing suffers in translation and editing.

Good first try. Get a proof reader and try to build a bit of romance or affection into the sex. Dina's blabbing to the cheating wife would have precluded a relationship, IMO. Keep writing.

Have someone proof read your work. It is very difficult to read.

5 Stars. Please continue.

She had multiple clits? Wild. By the way, Albatross has two 's' letters in in it, not one. A host of errors for a very, very shorty story. If you can't bother to edit something this short, why should anyone read it?

The premise and flow of the story was, in my opinion, pretty good but I am guessing American english might not be your first language due to some awkward wording and structure. All of this is quibbling, small points, still enjoyed the story...