All Comments on 'Discoveries Ch. 01'

by Eve_moon

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Highlander76Highlander76over 2 years ago

I found the inconsistent use of pronouns and possessive adjectives (him/her/me; his/her/my) thoroughly distracting from what could have been a really hot story. Please re-read carefully.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

MY FAVOURITE SENTENCE WAS " My orgasm was thick, salty and smelled of Virgin in heat. "

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

intense, sensual, finding all the most beautiful words. thick with scent.

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