All Comments on 'Discovery of Love and Submission'

I like your story but found the frequent errors very distracting and detracted from my enjoyment. Not exactly editing per se. Hope you can find someone to help - not a big job but will vastly improve readability. Cheers

Shortly before this story went up I found a way to improve my editing. I was too late to take it down by mere hours. I am striving myself to keep improving my skills and have less errors in my writing. I hope you will see the efforts of my hard work in future stories so you can full enjoy them. I am also open to any suggestions and criticism on how to improve my work.

Thank you for the feedback and I wish you the best.

Ashley

One trick I learned from my 5th grade teacher wife is to read your writing out loud to a wall. (She kept pictures of ears on the walls of the classroom for her students to read to.) That will help you find 95% of the readability issues.

Thanks for writing this. I really enjoyed the way you handled suggestion and the subtleties of control. Nice slow build. I found it a real turn on and very enticing. Love to read more. 🙏🤟🙏