All Comments on 'Do Her for Me'

Same shit different day.

Whatever he is in hospital for let us hope it’s terminal.

Loved it! 5 *. A part 2 would be nice, where the hospitalized husband discusses with Jake what has occurred. In fact, I'm modifying this story a little to be about my wife, and I'm going to write a part 2 where Jake visits the husband in the hospital, and Jake gives the husband his point of view.

Your bio says you write as a hobby. You need a new hobby because you suck at this. Dozens of stories most of which are rated as a complete disaster. It's so easy to score your attempts, an automatic 1* every time. I don't even need to read them.

Did you consider having the husband die at 10:15 that night with a smile on his face. Happy that his wife would be OK after he was gone.

She needs to visit him and show off her baby bump, as time goes by.

Weak not quite a man, giving his wife away. Again. Nothing new, different, exciting, redeeming, or loving about this. Why is the husband hospitalized? Did he have an accident weed whacking the yard? Did the wife become overly enthusiastic and fracture or bite something important? What caused him to be dysfunctional? Is it temporary or permanent? His stuff obviously still works, he took care of things earlier with no problems, so it must not be a heart issue either. If he is hospitalized short term can't his wife wait? Doesn't anyone exhibit patience when it comes to sex nowadays? "Oh honey, you'll be gone to the office all day! I can't wait so long, I'll have to call my emergency hookup to get me through the day!" People can't go the length of a hospital stay? I know someone hospitalized for a YEAR and they didn't call in the sex cavalry to save the day! They were too busy getting themselves well, they were one, even in sickness! This guy is obviously hospitalized for psych reasons because what he's doing is CRAZY! -- 1☆

Vicarious

Reminds me of that movie 'Breaking the waves' from a bit ago: a similar dilemma. With a little more background (why is the fellow in the hospital? He can get an erection but cannot copulate?) you'd have an intriguing story-line. Something different, but would be sweet to have a little more to work with.

At least the guys in your neighborhood know how good you are at sucking. And your writing isnt any good either.

Bad idea all around

I liked it but if he was so bedridden how come he was fingering her

Sick cuck in a sick story.