All Comments on 'Domme Linda returns'

Your series keeps getting better.

First story of yours I’ve read and I just couldn’t get into it. I assume it’s a continuation of another story/stories by the title and what the characters are saying but as I’ve not read those stories I couldn’t understand what was supposed to be going on. Maybe if it was labelled chapter whatever of a series I could have looked at the other stories before reading this one. Certainly as a stand alone story it doesn’t work for me.

You need to be more careful with your editing and be aware long paragraphs don’t work with Lit stories especially when you are giving a list of information. The tendency is to skip over it and if it’s important the reader loses contact with what’s happening.