All Comments on 'Downpour Causes See through Blouse'

Second person is useful.... when writing how to instructions. It is almost always dull in storytelling.

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This belongs in Erotic Encounters.

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PS: I'm not a fan of 1st person, not to mention some typing blotches.

You can write okay, but don't do it in 2nd person. This had potential but 2nd person POV just makes the whole thing distracting.

Not bad. But second person stories are so hard to read.

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2nd person sucks and is an automatic rating of 1.

A Loving Wives story involving a loving husband and wife.

How novel!

Good story but you need to use a different person point of view. I/you becomes too repetitive.

Wrong category.

Wrong POV.

With your words you penned a very enjoyable video of a VERY loving wife and her loving husband. See? Second person works both ways.

detroitdave

You ain’t holding me tight, and definitely ain’t kissing my neck.

Second person ("You") is almost never a good idea for a story, and especially not an erotic one.

Lost me when you used the "its" to open the sentence without the apostrophe.