All Comments on 'Dungeon Builder's Harem Book 02 Ch. 02'

Going to echo other feedback I’ve seen, but your Porn:Plot ratio is way off. You’re 37 chapters deep, but had actual material for maybe 20 of them. This chapter was ~2300 words, with maybe three paragraphs of plot-relevant text.

I like the ideas here, but I know you can do better.

I know this is going to be strange to say on a site like this... but could you at least try to not be so cliche porny? There is absolutely zero plot, and half-assed 'recap' that is seriously not needed.

This is another 'chapter' that can be safely skipped as there is absolutely zero content worth reading about that pushes the story along.

I'm going to predict that the whole next 'chapter' will be a mother/daughter suck/fuck/lick fest that maybe the friend will join and that will be the whole 'chapter', again with zero plot. as of Dec 12, '22.

Excellent start to book 2. The plot here (continued from the previous chapter) is totally engaging from start to finish. Wonderful characters throughout. Five stars.