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AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

When this girl dreams I wonder which tense she dreams in. You have a lot of errors with tense: mostly present tense and past tense; a few times - future.

A few times I wondered if you used a speach to type programme - ware comes to mind but I will allow you to re-read and find othrrs.

An editor might serve you well should you find a competent editor.

There is also the chance that English is not your first language. If this is the case, you have done well; if not, back to a competent editor.

He came, you came, he left. Hmmmmm

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