All Comments on 'Emberlene Ch. 01'

Can't wait to see where you go from here. Maybe less on the literary and more on the erotica?

Great nonetheless.

I enjoyed it too. Though i do agree that you might have spent a bit too long describing stuff in the beginning.

Brilliant sex scene though.

Please write chapter 2.

More please! I loved it. Your writing style is great. And the story is very enthralling.

...and I disagree that there was too much build up, but then I would :) It gives the fucking a much-needed third dimension. I do wish there was more.

It's tragic that this was never continued. If perchance you should see this comment, Maxwell, please consider doing so! I would be more than happy to be your editor, should you need one. :)