All Comments on 'Emma Watson - A Story of Love & Sex'

You have potential, fellow writer. The story was overall very hot and climactic, well-scripted. Suggestions for improvement- work to correct grammar & spelling. Also continue to diversify the cast- can we bring in Lindsay Lohan, Bonnie the actress who played Ginny Weasley, and other redhead characters? Maybe also Cho Chang’s actress whose name I can’t remember, or a black girl Hillary knows? Maybe even a guy both Emma & Hillary in your universe want as a unicorn in their marriage, maybe base him on one of their real life significant others… if you’re comfortable with writing any of that. Diversity is progress IMO. But ultimately do what makes you happy. I will support that as long as I’m your fan.