All Comments on 'Escape from Earth Ch. 05'

It is just so plodding and tedious, 5 pages for what could've been two. Everything is beyond two-dimensional, dialog is stilted, just painful to read.

Will Adam kill Xora or heal her? That's the question.

How about a Xanxaa point-of-view chapter?

Do you know the term T.S.T.E.? It means "Too Stupid To Exist". And I mean your aliens with advanced technology, who can't see with their own eyes and comprehend, that clothes in a clothed human culture are necessary. Or that a fucking in a culture, where fucking isn't a way to say "thanks", stuns everyone instantly. So, logically thinking, an alien AMBASADOR, who can't see those things, is just a fine sample of TSTE. And you obviously didn't put any thought about that.

Don't listen to the haters.

Write YOUR story however the hell YOU want.

I'mma still gonna read it.

Keep the story going just like how it is, the pace of the story is great can't wait to read more!!!

Keep it going

I appreciate all the feedback I've received so far, both the thoughtful and less-than-thoughtful. I take all constructive criticism as a way to improve my writing, so thank you. I hope everyone continues to read more, and I hope you enjoy it!

Hey! First story I've ever commented on and I love it! Great plot for a porno and don't listen to your haters, the only thing that the story needs is titty fucking, maybe it's like her ultimate way to heal or something (for life) but Adam goes on about how huge her boobs are so I think he should fuck them!

Just one thing (and maybe you've answered it), but I thought Xanxaa was contemplating killing our hero...

You wrote:

"After drying themselves off, they both wearily stumbled naked into bed and enclosed their arms around the other."

(then, moments later, after never having left the bed...)

You wrote:

"He took his clothes off and then embraced Xanxaa..."

THE mantra in real estate is 'location, location, location'.

In writing, the mantra is 'continuity, continuity, continuity'.

Oops... LOL